Personally, the article may as well have concluded by the second-last paragraph in the description. Everything beyond that point can be halved in content or removed. Even worse, the tone is terribly wooden throughout where there is a lack of writing style to keep the reader's attention, whereas multiple clauses can be joined by conjunction or compressed to avoid repetition. The artistic depictions would have benefitted from this the most.
Specifically speaking about content better off removed is the GOI accounts, whereas the description and 720-C event are repeated 3 different times with little to no variation nor insight to offer. This along with the pedantic separation of each clause into a whole sentence bloats the article, not even for reinforcing some effect on the reader.
I've compiled a few nitpicks and errors to consider below.
Individuals interacting with RPC-720-A instances prior to them coming under the effect of RPC-720 will describe them as extremely joyful.
I read this sentence multiple times and I don't understand why prior familiarity of victims is relevant to their joyfulness. Try:
Civilian accounts of RPC-720-A describe them feeling ecstatic for long periods of time, some attributing to a hypomanic episode.
Prayers spoken by RPC-720-A instances are comprised of randomized syllables from the instance's native language. Words produced by the RPC-720-A instance are made up of random syllables from their native language.
I'm not sure why you needed to seperate these two sentences as they describe the same clause. Try:
Words and prayers spoken by RPC-720-A instances comprise of randomized syllables from the instance's native language.
Evidence-720-021 depicts the cultist surrounding a floating humanoid with a bovine head below a cloudy sky.
Did you mean a singluar cultist or multiple? Doesn't make sense for a single person to surround something unless they're caressing/embracing them, in which case use that word instead.
Various winged humanoids can be seen surrounding the humanoid instance. Two large horns and be seen in the background of the painting with the sun between the horns The sun can be seen in the background with two large bovine horns.
We are in the location and we’re ready to beach in. Do we know what’s going on in there? Over. ,over?
The riflemen fire upon the man, but the man rises through the hole in the roof seemingly unaffected.
Headers within the PCAAO document should be dimmer for readibility's sake.
Anomaly No.1085is a phenomenon
Anomaly No.1085will begin
Add spaces.
The investigatory team alerted a local outpost and several CNSA satellites were utilized to monitor the ascending villagers.
The agent observed several individuals within the cult grow a pair of horns
