Comments for page "RPC-208"

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Fri, 25 Aug 2023 03:19:33 +0000

…gains the ability to speak telepathically.
…gain the ability to telekinetically manipulate its environment

This is missing Psychotronic Hazard in the Hazard Types.

MST-█████-27

Why would a MST be redacted? Plus I don't think there are any MSTs that exist with that number and a 5 letter word.

Projectile Hazard added to hazard list.

Did you mean: Ballistic Hazard

The writing and tone in most parts of the piece are off and can use more work.

In general, I found this to be surprisingly decent. The best part was the anomaly speaking one line after lines of it doing stuff in the experiment logs, which was funny. 3 stars, could be 4 if the writing and tone was better.

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Wed, 26 Oct 2022 21:33:32 +0000

I found "Coral Bill Psychic Pants" enjoyable, but I can't tell exactly how much of that was ironic enjoyment. There are legitimately good parts, though: the base concept is intriguing, the character is funny from, given, what little we see of it, and the recovery log is delightfully gruesome. (It is structured in a bizarre way, though.)

Otherwise, this article is spongy and formless (obligatory pun for my review). It lacks a real sense of direction. I can at least tell that the final experiment log is supposed to be a climax, but it takes so long to get to the point that it doesn't work well. And even though I find the writing amusing, I can't deny that it's objectively of poor quality.

Additionally, the whole "amnesticize anyone who talks to it" theme is odd. This is an old article, but even so, it doesn't make a whole lot of sense. I see no implication that it does anything other than make idle conversation and request to be freed when kept docile.

2/5. I initially wanted to give a 3/5, but this is not list quality.

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Mon, 11 Jan 2021 01:12:37 +0000

This one's got a pretty fun concept to go with, but it could use some expansion — maybe an interview or encounter log to introduce 208's character? The tests logs are neat, but some better descriptions would make them better. Maybe they could be written in such a way that the properties of 208 were explored more in-depth (like with the last log).

It's not a bad article, but again; missed opportunity to elaborate on the personality and properties of the anomaly.