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Re: Active Camo Material

Rational Gaze 05 Jun 2026 21:14
in discussion Writing & Drafts / Drafts » Active Camo Material

Yeah.

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Re: Cerebral Motility

dotflow 05 Jun 2026 20:57
in discussion Writing & Drafts / Drafts » Cerebral Motility

I'm terrible at criticism so all I'm gonna say is that the Funhouse VS Titania Saga is REALLY funny.

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The Vaguepost King

dotflow 05 Jun 2026 20:33
in discussion Writing & Drafts / Drafts » The Vaguepost King

Not sure if this will get anywhere but I had an idea and made this
http://rpcsandbox.wikidot.com/the-vaguepost-king

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Re: Active Camo Material

redgi110 05 Jun 2026 17:15
in discussion Writing & Drafts / Drafts » Active Camo Material

You just added mention that Nucorp too produced camo alloy and that someone ordered it to fight Soshi… and nothig else.

Rational Gaze 05 Jun 2026 15:53
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » RPC-468

Hold on to your butts:
http://rpcauthority.wikidot.com/forum/t-17245610/active-camo-material

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Re: Active Camo Material

Redtide 05 Jun 2026 07:44
in discussion Writing & Drafts / Drafts » Active Camo Material

Nothing to say of the Containment Protocols, simple and solid.

DESCRIPTION:

What is this secondary ability? The Charge? The degenerate matter? Make this more clear.

"Testing has since demonstrated a second capability" Oh, maybe have that paragraph before the other one, as that'd erase any confusion. May need to rewrite those 2 to mix them together and flow better.

TEST LOG:

I like the Test log, though it would be nice to see what the bottom end is like. Sure, it can deflect bullets, but how slow is slow moving to not deflect? Maybe a test on sledgehammers, jackhammers, pistons and even fisticuffs would be nice to show the low end.

"the original material sourced for this purpose was obtained from an alternate dimension." Man, I have a strong bias against when things like this are laid bare. Maybe the documentation uses an in house designation sequence, like a series of numbers/letters dictating a different dimension (E14-SOMNO). Doesn't make sense to us, but make perfect sense with the people who wrote the original documentation. (this is just my opinion)

DISCOVERY:

Everything seems good, a patent like that coming out in 2025 is something. Thought it'd be a bizarre later year but then again, adds to the surreality.

I'd also say maybe the part of ongoing stealth research shouldn't be in the Discovery paragraph. Also, you gotta think about making an addendum about the ongoing research, it'd be cool.

ADDENDUM:

"human remains found with their orifices sewn shut and their eyes removed," Would be nice to specify in a footnote how this was done, Whether through the RPC, human violence or some other unknown means.

OVERALL:

Solid idea, maybe put that it's "pending Utility" in its Designation.

Also, how're you gonna make a cool-ass stealth metal and NOT have Addendums about it being implemented in Stealth operations/Testing? Yes I know the Cow had something going on, but…give a few designs for a Stealth Suit at least! That's be cool (my Personal one is an exoskeleton with thick panel sheets of the RPC welded to the exterior, a big battery pack on the back. Rejected for obvious reasons)

Re: Finalized Version for The Emperor Crit

Mr Makor 05 Jun 2026 06:10
in discussion Writing & Drafts / Drafts » Finalized Version for The Emperor

Open Grammatical/Spelling Corrections

While it remains ambiguous how the entity manifested to its current form, it is purported that he was involved in various immolations during his reign as Emperor until his subsequent passing on July 30th, 1912.

TO

Note: I'm uncertain if you are referring to immolating himself or others. The act of immolation is also a sacrificial suicide; thus, implying there are multiple suggestions he's doing it to others. However, the wording "involved" makes it seem as though he is taking part.
So, here are two rewrites for either version.

While it remains unclear how the entity came to its current form, it is believed he subjected [Insert Persons] to various anomalous immolation rituals during his reign as Emperor until his passing on July 30th, 1912.

OR

While it remains unclear how the entity came to its current form, it is believed that he subjected himself to an anomalous immolation ritual during his final days of reign as Emperor. He would finally succumb to his burn injuries on July 30th, 1912.

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RPC-800’s gelatinous mucus, referred to as RPC-800-G, has been analyzed to be corrosive when in contact with skin tissue. Observed subjects in contact with the corrosive mucus results in muscle spasms around the body, usually lasting between 2-3 minutes.

TO

RPC-800’s gelatinous mucus, referred to as RPC-800-G, has been analyzed to possess corrosive properties only when in contact with the epithelial cells of the dermis. Once the mucus breaches the hypodermis, it binds with the subject's muscular fibers. The result is regional spasms that spread throughout the body and last from 2 to 3 minutes.

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Subject’s internal anatomy is violently compressed inward, causing blood to exit through various openings in the human body. Vast amounts of blood are observed to exit through the mouth, nose, and eye holes.

TO

The subject’s internal anatomy is violently compressed deeper inward, causing compaction of all organ systems. As a result, arterial hypertension causes ruptured aneurysms throughout the body. Eventually, victims die from asphyxia caused by blood pooling in the lungs, throat, and nose.

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When the blood exits from the subject, it inexplicably covers the body and dematerializes entirely within minutes. It is hypothesized that the subject’s body is transported somewhere in RPC-800-B.

TO

When the blood exits from the subject's facial features, it inexplicably covers the body, dematerializing the victim within minutes. It is hypothesized that the subject’s body is transported to an unknown location somewhere within RPC-800-B.

Open Dialogue Corrections

Note: This is an overall rewrite of the Addendum 800-7 dialogue section. Lore and plot points are maintained, but I felt the back-and-forth was stilted.

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[BEGIN LOG]

Capt. Himari Fukuda: (Slams table) An internal investigation by Ethics?! Like the breach and forced amnestics weren't bad enough.

Dr. Masaki Furusyo: Circumstances have deviated, Captain. I'm simply here to determine who is at fault for this incident.

Capt. Himari Fukuda: The hell are you to judge my men and me? They deserve to be remembered as heroes! Not have their names dragged through the bureaucratic mud pit.

Dr. Masaki Furusyo: I understand your grievances, Captain. But a loss of this magnitude requires analysis. Even if it dishonors some of the fallen, learning from their mistakes protects the living.

Capt. Himari Fukuda: (No Response)

Dr. Masaki Furusyo: Captain, please.

Capt. Himari Fukuda: (Rubs nose) Fine.

Dr. Masaki Furusyo: (Sighs, shuffles paper) Captain, from the beginning. Your actions, please.

Capt. Himari Fukuda: Well, before I met you and your—

Dr. Masaki Furusyo: Captain. You're being recorded. Now, please, only the facts.

Capt. Himari Fukuda: (coughs) Coffee. I went to get coffee. This was obviously before containment failure. I was in line at the vending machine, just behind Dr. Takanashi. He was about to order when Dr. Ishiba came out of nowhere, roaring about a discovery in a forest that involved RPC-800.

Dr. Masaki Furusyo: Do you know the exact contents that were being discussed?

Capt. Himari Fukuda: No. It was public, so details were sparse. Takanashi left with him before ordering.

Dr. Masaki Furusyo: From the way you describe it, the situations sounded serious. Is there a reason you didn't follow?

Capt. Himari Fukuda: You researchers always run around, papers in hand, yelling about wild new findings. Dr. Ishiba's uproar was just your casual early morning background noise.

Dr. Masaki Furusyo: I see. What happened next?

Capt. Himari Fukuda: I got my coffee and headed back to my office. That's when I wandered into a corridor, noticed a few signs, and saw people trying to clean up that disgusting black goop. As Captain, I instructed security not to touch the material without proper PPE, just as a precaution. I was mid-explanation about the importance of PPE when the lights began flickering. We all knew something wasn't right. I ordered the guards to escort researchers in the nearby labs to a containment bunker while I rushed to find Doctors Takanashi and Ishiba.

Dr. Masaki Furusyo: Did you encounter any casualties on your way to find them?

Capt. Himari Fukuda: (Pauses) I, uh. Did. Several guards and a few researchers, including Dr. Ishiba, were convulsing on the floor. I couldn't do anything for them, and they knew it. We all knew it. Once it [RPC-800-B] gets on your skin, there's no chance for recovery. Despite knowing that, they still begged me to save them. I. And so I did, in the only way available.

Dr. Masaki Furusyo: I'm sorry to hear that.

Capt. Himari Fukuda: (Heavy exhale, quivers) We— We lose people every day. It is what it is, unfortunately.

Dr. Masaki Furusyo: And what of the other doctor? What was their condition?

Capt. Himari Fukuda: The doctor— Takahashi. Oh. I ran through the corridors, leaping over that damnable shit, mind racing a million kilometers an hour. I eventually found her at the feet of, well, him.

Dr. Masaki Furusyo: Him? Who?

Capt. Himari Fukuda: RPC-800. He—. I drew my sidearm and shot, but the bullets phased right through him.

Dr. Masaki Furusyo: Phased through? Please elaborate.

Capt. Himari Fukuda: It's hard to put it into words, but he seemed to phase in and out of reality when I shot him, like his whole body was a flickering light. I was so tunnel-focused that a few of my rounds hit Takhashi. Her caries finally broke me, and I just shut down, dropped my gun without even realizing. RPC-800 was now looking at me, muttering some bullshit. The lights flickered again, and he then vanished. As if a spell had been lifted, my senses shot back into my mind, and I leaped to Takahashi's aid to hopefully stop the bleeding.

Dr. Masaki Furusyo: Moving the focus back onto RPC-800, the muttering part. Were you able to tell what he was saying?

Capt. Himari Fukuda: (Stutters) No— No. I wasn't all there. So, are we done? I need to check on Takahashi.

Dr. Masaki Furusyo: Uh, yeah. Actually, I think that's enough for today. Thank you for your time.

[END LOG]

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Open Overall Takeaway

The article is pretty good, and overall, my takeaway was quite positive.
My only gripe is that I felt the reasoning for the Emperor's bid for immortality and the means by which he obtained it were a bit vauge. We're given the impression he doesn't want to die, but I'd like to know why. I would also like to see more regarding his transformation and how it was accomplished, who he learned it from, etc. You do not need to go so far as to remove all aura of mystery, but there is some room here to vaguely characterize him and his actions.
Overall, it's a pretty solid article, and with the suggested modifications, it will be stellar.

Re: A Hundred Years More

antdem0n 05 Jun 2026 06:08
in discussion Writing & Drafts / Drafts » Cerebral Motility

+Overall Crit

I found this to be an enjoyable read. The story was compelling, the characters interesting, and the conclusion while not perfect was satisfying enough. There are a lot of strange word choices made, but I assume those are simply from ESL.

I do question a lot of the characterization of both the anomaly and the researcher. Not necessarily their personalities or what they do, but more how those personalities are shown. For example, while I understand that her not remembering fredo is meant to emphasize that she’s lived a long time and is going through the motions, not truly internalizing anything. It gets a weird amount of emphasis only to lead ultimately nowhere.

Her relationship with her brother could use some expansion as well. It’s her primary motivation to not just sit and be sedentary throughout some incredibly bloody conflicts throughout Colombian history. I’m not saying to write an entire litany on it, but it could use some more.

That being said, I do appreciate the use of actual history in the article beyond just “What if historical events, but anomalous?” It’s a nice nod to a lot of terrible conflicts in the region, and helps ground the story. I almost wish it were given more of a spotlight but that’s also just me thinking history is cool and not practical advice for the article.

The strange word choices also detract from the article in a pretty big way. Mostly due to the fact I have to stop and think about what’s being said for a second before I realize the intent. That being said, the fact that the dialogue is written in such a way actually enhances the article. It really sells the fact that it’s a translation rather than a document written in English. Translated documents tend to have a particular mouthfeel that isn’t present in originally English writing, and this article hits it dead on.

The conclusion isn’t as satisfying as I would like it to be. It kinda comes out of nowhere and we get absolutely no resolution as to how this incident affects the RPC. No one comments on it beyond “He was a goofy goober, and he’s fucking dead. We’re shipping the lady off to Panama.” Dude’s dead, article over, stop by the gift shop on your way out. I’d recommend trying to find a way to bring up her emotional response to the trauma of murdering a man, whom she personally taught as a schoolchild.

+Line By Line Crit

RPC-███ is contained

Should be “Is to be contained”. Future tense as the containment protocols are instructions on how to contain an anomaly. Not a document about a past event. Also as an aside this is the second time I’ve seen a placeholder use redactions rather than XXX, which threw me for a loop.

specialized CSD containment cell within the personnel facility, refurbished with basic amenities

The authority has standardised humanoid containment cells. On top of this, basic amenities include things like a toilet, clothes, food, and a bed. Which means you’re implying that the basic CSD cells don’t have those. I understand you mean her room is a little more personalized, but ‘basic amenities’ is an actual term used in things such as prisons for this purpose.

human female in its early 20s

Most humanoid anomalies I’ve read tend to describe the subject’s ethnicity. I suppose it’s not entirely necessary, but I feel it would probably be included by the Authority for the sake of identification.

which lack senesce

This sentence makes sense. That being said I did need to look up the word ‘senesce’ which took me out of the article. I suggest either rewording it to a lower reading level or adding a footnote explaining the definition.

at 95 to ≈1230 cm

Should also be a ‘cm’ by 95

below the hypodermis

Already knew what a hyperdermis is because I spend too much time around Red. Not everyone has, should probably include a footnote explaining it.

strong regenerative ability specific to muscle and nerve tissue

This needs to be rewritten. At first I thought it meant that it could only repair muscles and nerves. Even if that were the case, it would still be an unwieldy sentence. However, a few lines later you describe bones being repaired by the anomalous ability. Bones are neither muscles nor tissues, they are mineral and protein deposits. Closer to rocks than muscles, honestly.

regeneration is based on complexity of the damaged part

You describe it as the complexity of the part, then go on to describe how it’s based on severity of the injury instead. Should be rewritten so it’s consistent.

This essentially grants RPC-███ motor control

Remove the word ‘essentially’ here. More clinical that way.

hair filaments

Hair filaments are an actual part of human hair. This would be fine however it was explicitly stated that the subject has no hair, and they are all instead nerve endings. Should be slightly rephrased to be more consistent.

On 20/05/2013, a police report was filed about a woman who disarmed a member of the ELN5 with her hair. He was later apprehended, confirmed the report and added he only did it in retaliation to the one time she ”compelled [him] to jump off a cliff” in 1989. Authority front companies flagged a series of matching teaching credentials spanning over five decades in rural Colombia, previously flagged for identity fraud until a corroborating facial scar from this incident was completely healed in the subsequent teaching credential.

Words cannot describe how confused this paragraph made me when I read it the first three times. There’s an it here that isn’t described at all, the timeline of events is all over the place. The fact that they got a lead that she was a schoolteacher isn’t explained at all, so it comes out of nowhere. The facial scare confused me because if it’s on paperwork it should be a near-permanent scar, but doesn’t she heal broken bones in a couple of hours? It should’ve healed before anyone had a chance to write it down. This scar is also completely irrelevant to the rest of the story.

and released shortly after.

So he was charged but acquitted? Either elaborate that corruption was at play or remove this segment.

school tools

I get what you’re trying to say here but in English we tend to refer to these as “School supplies” rather than tools.

All but one doctor cared, god bless his soul

All but one would mean that every doctor except for one cared. Which doesn’t make sense for what is trying to be conveyed.

its students having been abducted

Remove ‘having been’

Subject’s incessant tendency

On a technical level, incessant is correct. However that word in English is negatively charged, and comes with an implication of annoyance or derision, harming the clinical tone.

subject externally experiences the same pain responses of those it inserts its nerves into

Even if this were the case, it was stated previously that she is no longer capable of feeling pain. Her brain just isn’t experiencing the response stimuli anymore. On top of this, the sentence is clumsily worded, and would need a minor rephrasing regardless.

my noggin sharp

Should replace noggin with “mind” or “wit” here. Noggin is too informal and doesn’t fit with what she speaks like throughout the rest of the article.

This continues for two

Should be ‘continued’. It’s in past tense.

a second CSD-7721, of which none were currently available

The way this is phrased implies they have multiple CSD-7721, which the number denotes a specific guy. Should be something like “A second CSD” or “A second Confined Subject (Disposable)”

Freudian slip

Should be ‘slip of the tongue’. A freudian slip is a mistake that reveals unconscious thoughts or desires. Like this, he’s implying he genuinely thinks she’s fat. Which is funny, but probably not the intended route.

I do not care about the ethics of humanoid containment

This is the funniest sentence to read both in and out of context. I have no crit here, I just needed to get that out there.

+Final thoughts

Overall, this was a fun, but kind of disappointing read. I feel like there’s a lot of things that can be explored in this article that isn’t. The history, the relationship with her brother, the emotional response of her icing a man, all of it is interesting but unexplored. There’s a case to be made for subtlety I suppose, all of this stuff is strongly implied which makes it fun, but not having it out in the open I feel weakens the article.

The ideas presented in the article are interesting, and if I thought the concept or draft was bad I wouldn’t have expended the effort in critting it. You have something good here, but it can be made even better. I want to see it made as good as it can possibly be. My thoughts aren’t as clear as I would want, but that’s a natural consequence of writing this crit over multiple days, and during long nights.

Your verbal sparring matches with Sheepsy is funny, but I will say this crit is applicable only to this version of the article. I did not begin this knowing there were two versions, and I decided not to pivot it halfway though. I will also not be critting two drafts for the price of one, I do not have the time for that, especially as this crit here took 3, almost 4, days of my actual life to complete.

Also I have been made somewhat aware that I am essentially criting a different draft at this point, but also I’ve put too much time and effort into this to just not post it. Have fun with it

I would ultimately rate this article 4 stars. A lot of odd phrasing here, but I tried not to rag too hard on that. A nice piece that doesn’t quite reach what I think is its full potential.

dotflow 05 Jun 2026 02:28
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » RPC-692

Don't worry, I've gotten to it!

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Finalized Version for The Emperor

DrPierson 05 Jun 2026 02:10
in discussion Writing & Drafts / Drafts » Finalized Version for The Emperor

http://rpcsandbox.wikidot.com/main-operationalwolf

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"Curiosity Always Defines Reasoning"

Malfestance 05 Jun 2026 02:06
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » RPC-692

Before you see my long chain of grammatical/tonal criticism please do understand that I love this article to death. The issues below must be addressed because they take away from an otherwise fantastic read.

it supposedly hails from

Should be

"it supposedly originates from" OR "from which it claims to originate" OR "from which it supposedly originates"

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The sebum footnote is not necessary, and reads like the author has low trust in the reader to understand what sebaceous glands are for which doesnt make sense in-universe.

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any sapient being within close proximity will begin to reciprocate and harmonize with the subject.

If this is an invariable guaranteed effect, "begin" should be qualified with "invariably." If it is not guaranteed, this should be indicated too. In this sentence it is unclear if it just very likely or guaranteed imo.

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When approached, RPC-692 will greet any nearby sapient being, asking if they would like anything.

"would like anything" is unclinical and breaks up the tone a bit. If it is just that 692 tries to provide assistance with acquiring something (as opposed to something anomalous) I would rephrase it to something like:

When approached, RPC-692 will greet any nearby sapient being and express desire to assist them in acquiring something of their choosing.

If it is just general helpful assistance in general:

When approached, RPC-692 will greet any nearby sapient being and express desire to assist them with any task the subject may specify.

As well, I feel this sentence is kind of a loose end. Does it actually follow up with assistance? What does "would you like anything" mean?
If you really don't care to develop this sentence further then at minimum you should make it a direct quote and say something like:

When approached, RPC-692 will greet any nearby sapient being. RPC-692's has been observed to very consistently follow up with "Would you like anything?" after salutation.

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RPC-692: [Twirls a strand of hair around her finger] […]

Accidental use of personal pronoun. Consider:

RPC-692: [Twirling a strand of hair around finger] […]

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Falin: The Authority is not your "friend".

Here the punctuation goes inside the quote.

RPC-692 leaves the chamber, describing the experience as "serendipitously wonderful” and that it would “love to do it again”.

Should be:

and stated that it would "love to do it again."

There are more occurences of improper punctuation order, so generally: Punctuation should stay inside quotation unless doing so affects the connotation of the quote itself. So "Until recently"? should stay as such because you don't mean to quote someone asking "Until recently?" verbatim. On the other hand,

not your "friend".

should be inside, and so on. Aside from "!" and "?" all punctuation should go inside the quotation. Ignoring this leads to awkward renderings later on like

"Suadela"¹.

Compare:

"Suadela."²

Cleaner!

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supplied by Junior Researcher Eisner, contained plastic mibrofibers,

Microfibers.

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Falin: Dr. Falin remained quiet before jotting down some notes. If you say that […]

Stay consistent with your prior interview format:

Falin: [Remains quiet before jotting down some notes] If you say that […]

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Overall, a fantastic debut article. I loved the interview as the dialogue read both realistically with the well-placed awkward laughs and innocent smiles as well as being par for the course for what you'd expect a fairy tale princess to sound like. This is a hard balance to strike and where dialogue tends to be challenging even to older writers like myself you've nailed it. The Mayflower log was dually disconcerting with both the slight body horror and her creepily not knowing what pain is.

The cross-testing portions were fun too.

However, the various tonal/grammatical errors take away from the article so much that I can't give it the 5/5 I think it deserves, and I have to rate it 4/5 until then. Please fix!!

Footnotes

1. Example.

2. Example.

Jokezm 04 Jun 2026 21:37
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Censorship under Veil expansionism, Russian sorceress wins the Fulwell Awards, and More

THE WWWJ

Censorship Under Veil Expansionism

By Jokezm

Friday, June 5th, 2026__

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Another article on the WWWJ. I want to establish first its relationship with the Authority as a precedent for future articles. This takes place during the 2024 GD elections, FYI.

Also, Yushatyr is my goat.

Original forum thread

Crit:
Funhouse
CaptainFormidable

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Re: Active Camo Material

Rational Gaze 04 Jun 2026 20:14
in discussion Writing & Drafts / Drafts » Active Camo Material

OK, so I've added some stuff to try and give it more of an actual story based on suggestions and recommendations both here and on Discord.
1. the material is from an another dimension and has certain anomalous properties but is experimented with using femotechnology to make the final product.
2. since other dimenions are involved, I decided to have it so the recovered instances in the Authority's possession were made by GEAR but that the baseline version of NuCorp were on the cusp of creating the same material.

Not really sure if that is enough. I doubt that it is but am unsure where to go from here.

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Re: RPC-692 Thoughts.

dotflow 04 Jun 2026 19:12
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » RPC-692

Thank you so much for the criticism, I'm happy you liked the article and I hope you'll help me with future articles!

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RPC-692 Thoughts.

Adejny 04 Jun 2026 17:48
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » RPC-692

I'll state my crits on specifics first and then my general thoughts overall.

In the first paragraph of the description, "Despite eating and drinking, the subject does not require defecation or urination. If it has the capability to do so is unknown." is written awkwardly, maybe having it be written like "Despite requiring sustenance, RPC-692 has not been observed to excrete waste materials through urination or defecation." Something to that effect where it flows more naturally.

At the end of Addendum II, the closing statement feels redundant as it just states information we already know. It would've been nice to see more of Dr. Falin's thoughts.

There are a couple of redactions that I don't think were needed, like the date of RPC-692's discovery, the time between her being acquired by the Authority and incident Mayflower, and the researcher's names conducting the cross test experiment with RPC-072.

RPC-692-1 was very underutilized, in the sense that the information on it is so scant that it almost feels irrelevant, which shouldn't be the case given its how RPC-692 entered our reality.

A relationship I think could've been built upon more was RPC-692's connection with animals, like if she could have some influence over their behavior, playing with that Disney princess theme she has going on. Maybe when she was wondering Europe she could've had a massive trail of animals following her and that's what really alerted the Authority into containing her. This is more of a subjective thing, the article still works fine without this specific element being elaborated upon.

End of Crit.

Overall I enjoyed this article. I find RPC-692 to be somewhat tragic because she's such a pollyanna she cannot grasp the severity of certain situations like with incident Mayflower. When she told Dr.Falin "Whatever do you mean? I'm fine!" and the researcher is just left stunned for a moment before recomposing herself and taking notes really resonated with me, it was a highlight of the article.
I don't know how intentional this might've been, but I saw Falin as sort of a parallel to 692's stepmother, with her very clinical and apathetic tone. Like I said before, when she was taken aback by 692 saying she was fine, despite being in critical condition was really notable because of how Falin presented herself in Addendum II. I really would love to see you do more with these characters, in either a expanded addendum or even a tale if you ever decide to write one.
For a first article I think you did pretty well, I mean I liked it in anycase. Hope to see you improve and continue making works!

Staff Post - Removed Sandbox Link

DoubleDenial 04 Jun 2026 12:35
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Vatican Primacy Hub

Due to the new site rule on sandbox links, the following links were removed from the article:

• http://rpcsandbox.wikidot.com/demonymless
• http://rpcsandbox.wikidot.com/the-indira-page
• http://rpcsandbox.wikidot.com/omega-iota-hub

Staff Post - Removed Sandbox Link

DoubleDenial 04 Jun 2026 12:33
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Tango-12 "Eye From The Sky"

Due to the new site rule on sandbox links, the following link was removed from the article:

• http://rpcsandbox.wikidot.com/blue-star-goi

Staff Post - Removed Sandbox Link

DoubleDenial 04 Jun 2026 12:32
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » RPC-797

Due to the new site rule on sandbox links, the following link was removed from the article:

• http://rpcsandbox.wikidot.com/union-hub

Staff Post - Removed Sandbox Link

DoubleDenial 04 Jun 2026 12:31
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » RPC-447

Due to the new site rule on sandbox links, the following link was removed from the article:

• http://rpcsandbox.wikidot.com/american-aoi

Site rule on sandbox links

DoubleDenial 04 Jun 2026 12:28
in discussion Site Announcements and Proposals / Announcements » Site rule on sandbox links

There is a new site rule: you may not link to RPC sandboxes from canonical pages. This does not apply to metatext, such as guides and author pages.

Use of assets hosted on the sandbox (e.g. images, themes) is also permissible on any page, though "localizing" them to the main site is recommended.

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