(account deleted) 18 Jan 2019 17:08
The borked version ruins this beatiful jargonic piece.
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(account deleted) 18 Jan 2019 17:08
I really want to give this a +5, but I just can't. The zalgo font and red text just sorta ruins it, and it would be way better if it just went to the next iteration without any gimmicky fourth wall breaks. +2
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I don't take into account attached "peripheral" pages for my final rating, and have not fully read it yet1.
I found it to be hovering on an "alright" rating. Maybe a 4 because rat-kings are so fucking weird. I have grievances though that I will express.
First: Fuck using images in the hazards list. I genuinely despise whoever first did that, as it is one of the worst trends to be somewhat popular on the RPC. I don't want to waste time trying to remember what these pictograms mean, I want to read the hazards and get on with the page. They should not take anymore effort than "Oh, I have registered that".
Second: Fuck cordyceps. That is completely my own personal opinion and it did not impact on my rating of this page, but I cannot stand cordyceps. The entire genus has been bled dry of anything "spoopy". I understand that it works from a practical sense, hence why it did not impact on my rating.
Third: Fuck "pop up messages". I should not have to stare at a spot waiting to get a chance to read some generic spoop, nor should I have to go into the source code to make sure I haven't missed anything. Just make the text slightly darker white if you wanna hide spoops.
Fourth: Fuck zaglo. This, did have an impact on my opinions of this piece. My line of logic goes that if I see zaglo, I remove a star. I cannot stand zaglo, and do consider its use a detriment to most things published.
I enjoyed the actual effects of the anomaly, but certain format-breaking choices felt awful. The memetic screening image hurt my eyes to look at, I already expressed my hatred of zaglo, and my dislike of "pop up messages".
3 stars.
Footnotes
1. But that piece of eyesour is getting a 1 star out of principal.
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I feel that the basic concepts here are all stock and played-out, though the combination of them is a bit distinguishing in of itself. I've heard of mind-controlling parasites, hyper-intelligent hiveminds, and doors to messed-up alternate universes all before.
The foreshadowing of how it can influence humans is painfully obvious, and it's even more obnoxious how the reader is teased with that information before being plunged into a bunch of inessential test logs. They have one or two bits of foreshadowing, but the pacing would be better if they were removed entirely.
Afterwards is the format break, which immediately tanked any hope I had for this article. Narratively, it's the silliest and most unoriginal application of the genre that I've ever seen, which literally has no justification for being here. Visually, reading it almost gave me a migraine.
Besides the eye-rolling tone breaks of "Please." and "i know you can hear me", this part isn't too special either. Having the mushrooms form a door is a bizarre progression that comes out of nowhere, while the hook of infected humans resolves in an unsatisfying way. The concluding log is, I'm sorry to say, not very imaginative either. The world consists of little more than a bunch of rats and a spooky humanoid, and there have been far too many logs about the "tough and battle-scarred old agent" feeling bad for the younger guy.
I felt this was mostly unoriginal ideas with distasteful execution. Some of the writing and delivery shows effort, but I can't say I enjoyed reading this or that I believe it should stay around in its current state. 2/5 for the main page, 1/5 for the offset.
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