RPC-196 / Discussion

This is the discussion related to the wiki page RPC-196.

moist bread 16 Sep 2018 08:35

I'd like to thank ianofdoom2, carriontrooper, and "Biggest Head" (discord name) for critiquing this in its infancy, as well as numerous others.

(account deleted) 16 Sep 2018 19:40

I feel there is too many quotations on the containment protocols, so many it ruins the immersion before it's even completely set up. You should look into it, also, axolotls have become too much of a meme to be taken seriously when read like this, I think the taxonomical name would be better with the name "axolotl" referred to on the footnote.

wherein they are to do a randomly generated quantity (within reason) of ketamine

Reads very unprofessional, I'd recommend this to be worded as:

wherein they are to be administered a randomly generated quantity (within reason) of ketamine

Lifespan, not lifespawn.

in what it thought was traditional tax returns

This feels irrelevant to the article, almost entering -J territory. I suggest it is removed, or mentioned only on the interrogation if you feel this adds a slight comical tone.

On the interrogation log, there are a few typos that need revision. And this:

**<RPC-196 describes the containment procedure for RPC-XXX-A, which takes approximately 4 minutes>

This could be reworded to something more serious in tone like this:

RPC-196 proceeded to detail the containment procedure for RPC-XXX-A, taking approximately 4 minutes to do so

Same kind of rewording could be done on the incident log, since it reads too much like an RP log actually…

Almarduk 04 Sep 2020 21:05

in desperate need for some rewording and clinical tone improvements, but good still

would be a lot better without gravity falls

Dark Boat 08 May 2021 04:58

Guys, does anyone know RPC-009? Because it is in the article RPC-196 and I want to know who it is

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- Dark Boat

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onefullydone 16 Aug 2023 03:45

Intriguing premise that made me think a lot about the anomaly. It was funny to imagine that 4D Carl Sagan has an axolotl god unhappy and wanting to beat his ass over sharing his science. A problem I have is the wording and tone is weird at times like how RPC-196-A was being described in the description. Also considering that Site-099 is decommissioned/destroyed, an addendum would be necessary to show if RPC-196 survived and/or was transported to another site. Plus:

It will then [DATA EXPUNGED], resulting in ████ deaths,

If it can kill a four digit amount of people, shouldn't the lethality rating be reclassified as purple? Despite these issues, I still decided to rate this 4 stars.