RPC-224 / Discussion

This is the discussion related to the wiki page RPC-224.

Needs improvement on the exp. logs

ImNotEric 01 Sep 2018 00:29

Very much liked this idea, its a really good way of introducing this new GoI. That being said the experiment logs sound more like anecdotes than abridged reports. 4/5.

(account deleted) 19 Sep 2022 03:40

article a day day 7: rpc-224 by Redtide

i love good conprocs, and i think they often get undershadowed in favor of the description… they are so very important choo me… very good hook. contained in an ENVELOPE… thats CRAZY…

but then it totally falls off with the description. its very abbreviated (which isnt bad) but then it just totally loses any clinical tone. and the line "Any subject listening to the song will start bending structures and objects after 5 seconds or more of staring." is very sudden and seems like a very poor description of its effects…

however the experiment log is very cool and epic… great exploration of its effects and graphic description… but "skinny objects" are u serious… again this starts off strong but then sucks… like the last experimetn has ZERO punctuation??? tf…

however however, i think the letter is very cool. i like how the academy is not aggressive and the authority's response is not specified. like the academy just messed up, they want to fix it, did not intend for the brutal deaths… apparently this is where the Academy started..! cool beginning.

okay anyway, 3 stars. if the concept wasnt really cool and the letter sucked it would be 1 star, so this is just a little over acceptable. i want to fix this. i will…

onefullydone 08 Sep 2023 00:56

RPC-224 is to be contained in a simple envelope

Simple envelope, aka a envelope for a letter? It would be better to say to keep it inside a CD envelope or CD case.

In general, I love the idea. Everything in here was all interesting to see. From the horrible thought of spines breaking to a very nice letter. Although my main problem with the article is the amount of weird tone and grammar throughout. Several words also happen to be capitalized for some reason. If that was fixed, then I would be more than happy to give this 5 stars.

I wonder how this can bend yo mama

Abbefalkon 24 Sep 2023 09:52

Cool idea, meant to introduce the academy. Just wish it went through more polish, like fixing the clinical tone and grammatical issues. Additionally, there are some plot holes. How do reflection bend the observer, and not the reflective surface? How does a blindfold stop the effect, without getting warped itself?

3/5