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Thanks to those who gave feedback on this in its draft stage. Hope you enjoyed dis :p.
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Dreams. Each man longs to pursue his dream. Each man is tortured by this dream, but the dream gives meaning to his life. Even if the dream ruins his life, man cannot allow himself to leave it behind. In this world, is man ever able to possess anything more solid, than a dream?
~Kentaro Miura
(account deleted)Yo this is amazing and creative and could put teach us how you did this!
I knew the colors were missing what did you use modify the logos
Amazingly creative RPC. This one gets an upvote from me for sure. One suggestion though, this line of text, "Following use of EG-2 Extergito glyph on said resident…" comes off as a bit odd. I'd rewrite it to read something more like, "The affected resident was administered Class A, B, or C (whichever seems more appropriate) EG-2s (or just EGs)…" Of course, the sentence could be reworded to fit in EG as a singular noun, but as it stands, the phrase "EG-2 Extergito glyph" is very strange considering EG is just short for Extergito Glyph.
+5, hope in the future you come back to replace the Extergito Glyph situation as Vastille requested that it and all mentions would be removed. But that's something you couldn't have known.
Good CSS manipulation and it conveys exactly what it needs to. Don't think I can say anymore then what has already been stated.
Fixed the Extergito thingy. Thanks for the +5!
By the way, you didn’t actually gimme +5. How dare u >:^0
It was just a colour out of space.
Fairly enough, I wouldn’t be surprised if this RPC was inspired by Lovecraft’s story (which i still consider to be the best one). It’s well written but what warrants a 3 from me is the fact that the entire reading process isn’t paid off: we don’t get any options, no mystery, we’re slapped in the face by a very vague letter and we never get to know something about the anomaly, exactly. I’m not saying the anomaly’s true identity should be stated every time, but when there are no options given, no kickstarter, there is no mystery.
3/5. Maybe rewriting it to fit it into present day RPC wouldn’t be a bad idea.
Marco Marchi B. Mark
Wow, this felt bland. What's the hook? If anyone could point me towards the part of this article that's supposed to interest me, I would reconsider.
The concept wasn't that interesting; this could be a Lesser Anomalous Item. I don't normally like that complaint (I'm willing to take a somewhat tame object for the purposes of an interesting article), but this article is not interesting. The letter, while believable I guess, fails to add any narrative value. And the Amazing! Co. link is just… there?
Lastly, "oh whoops we put an infohazard in our article haha!!" is one of my least favorite article tropes. It draws much ire from me because it's wrong on so many levels: it's contradictory to the entire mission statement of the Authority, and usually a transparent and cheap scare tactic. This article doesn't pull the latter, but it still uses this asinine trope as a cheap excuse for an interface screw.
2/5. That's kind of harsh, but 3/5 is above the deletion threshold and I want to speak with my votes to say that this article really needs to be fixed up.
While adding a small story to the article is nice, it does not cover some of the other inconsistencies of the article. For example, the article itself being a perpetual containment breach because not only is the anomalous effect targeting it quite literally anyone can snap a picture of the page, or save the image to their device or do anything else to continue replicating the pattern. It doesn't even actively entice the viewer, but is entirely based on whatever Containment specialist lobotomizing himself before writing the procedures.
In short, it's a bad execution of a trope.
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