RPC-183 / Discussion

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Its good but there's something missing.

MintyMeteor 02 Sep 2018 18:41

The article has a good idea and is of good quality but one thing that I would expand on is this paragraph,

"RPC-183’s personality is described as being uncomfortably chipper often having a smile. In addition to RPC-183 is unable to fully comprehend human emotions, often leading to seemingly immoral behaviors."

No reason is given for it's ability to comprehend emotions and it really only affects one test so would recommend trying to incorporate this into the other test logs. Other than that it's a solid article.

H F Dummie 03 Sep 2018 03:22

Good idea, some flaws in execution. Some parts aren't concise and "scientific" enough.

CPs:

2 bathrooms measuring 1.5m x 2m x 4m, a living room measuring 8m x 8.5m x 5m, a kitchen along with a dining area measuring 7m x 9m x 5m, a bedroom measuring 9m x 9m x 5m, and a surgical lab measuring 9m x 8m x 4m

That is oddly specific. Will containment fail if the rooms are not of such specification? If not, then I see no point in adding such details.

3 now. 4 if these get fixed.

ThermicLine 09 Sep 2018 00:41

During the process of writing this actually, I came looking back whether or not I should keep it in. I'll take your criticism into consideration.

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Dreams. Each man longs to pursue his dream. Each man is tortured by this dream, but the dream gives meaning to his life. Even if the dream ruins his life, man cannot allow himself to leave it behind. In this world, is man ever able to possess anything more solid, than a dream?
~Kentaro Miura

ThermicLine 13 Sep 2018 18:26

I finally updated it to include the changes.

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Dreams. Each man longs to pursue his dream. Each man is tortured by this dream, but the dream gives meaning to his life. Even if the dream ruins his life, man cannot allow himself to leave it behind. In this world, is man ever able to possess anything more solid, than a dream?
~Kentaro Miura

H F Dummie 23 Sep 2018 10:37

Changed the rating in support of these changes.

JimmyJohnJohnson 26 Jun 2019 22:23

It’s good I just think isn’t he bit overpowered? Like can’t he just be used to heal anything?

ThermicLine 20 Aug 2019 03:26

I had a test entry where it presented that he does not have the ability to heal individuals from nerve damage or any major damage but scraped it since I thought that it was obvious enough from the death entry. So to clarify, he can not restore major bodily damage. Maybe minor damage like scars, but nothing else. I might re-add the entry in the future.

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Dreams. Each man longs to pursue his dream. Each man is tortured by this dream, but the dream gives meaning to his life. Even if the dream ruins his life, man cannot allow himself to leave it behind. In this world, is man ever able to possess anything more solid, than a dream?
~Kentaro Miura

DoubleDenial 10 Oct 2022 18:24

I happened upon this article because I was looking for an interesting Malthus piece, but I came back disappointed. "The Cosmetic Surgeon" has a mild case of almost everything that could be wrong with an article. A few of these flaws make sense in the context of a 2018 article, but it's still far from adequate.

Let's run over the list. Shoddy tone and phrasing? It's here. For starters, we have an RPC being referred to with human pronouns. Important details are placed earlier than they become relevant and in a footnote. There are overcomplicated and unnecessary sub-designations, and at least one instance of misplaced capitalization and missing spaces each. I don't like to nitpick, but these are issues that should be fixed in a single proofread.

Also, unrealistic containment. I disapprove of when authors go out of their way to make sad living conditions, but you can still take it too far in the other direction. I really don't care if this guy has the coziest living situation possible just so he'll be a little more willing to cooperate. Especially how he gets to go out in public three times a week for no particular reason. (Also, don't cross out an entire paragraph of the ConProts to correct a single word. That's some more shoddy writing for ya.)

There's an invocation of the always-cheap "all attempts at watching or recording this thing fail" card, which is never fun. Then there's an unnecessary discovery log.

The experiments all just feel like the same song and dance ad nauseam, and the CSD abuse is still not cool. The third log lands somewhere between being mildly amusing and being obnoxious lolAuthority for me, and I'm not really sure what to think of it. The fourth is odd, because I guess it's bad when Malthus creates genetically augmented super soldiers but it's alright when the Authority does it?

Both incidents are banal and add almost nothing, and the note at the end is illogical; an object class shouldn't change just because the object has breached containment.

Even as a reader who is generally willing to put up with proofreading and logical errors to enjoy an article, this one left me very disappointed. 1/5

(edit: corrected a word to a slightly more correct word)

Last edited on 20 Oct 2022 21:21 by DoubleDenial Show more

onefullydone 10 Aug 2023 00:08

Although everything I would say has already been said above me, I would like to mention how ridiculous it is that a total of 533,300,950 US dollars can just be paid as seen in the last experiment log and not get an immediate investigation at least.

I still found the concept and idea enjoyable, but the small flaws do add up. 3 stars for me.