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Had to repost. My RPC was deleted because of the Downvoting raid.
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(account deleted)Ok, this is one of my new favorites, I especially like that it only preys on lone individuals.
Downvoted cause this was re-uploaded to clear downvotes. Next time, please make improvements to your RPC before reposting.
Don't mix metric and imperial units, this is a scientific document (in universe), and as such metric would be used exclusively.
Also, how do the Foundation have such precise measurements for this incredibly violent creature that only appears if you're the only person in the room? Did they just ask politely for 400 to stay still while they shoved a ruler into its mouth?
Also also, you should go into more detail as to what is considered a "room" and explain that one can still watch it through a window without it demanifesting before mentioning it in a test.
I love the concept, it preys on the really simply fear of being alone and the first three paragraphs were particularly effective at establishing the tone, with the exception of a few things. The 'with these under these conditions' error in the third paragraph bothers me, the accuracy of the teeth measurement seems a bit odd, and the 'constant speed of 43km/h' contradicts the interview where the creature slowly built up its speed towards the scientist. Maybe include a testing log for the top speed of the creature, or just remove the speed measurement entirely due to the inability to actually test for a top speed accurately inside Site 51. There's also a few other grammatical errors within the page that don't necessarily take away as much from the RPC but it could still use a touch-up.
Overall though, I really like this RPC. The idea of a 'cursed' Authority Site where people have to act a certain way to contain a genuinely scary anomaly is very interesting to me, and I upvoted your post.
You have a good article here, the horror is quite easy to feel when reading it. However, there are some grammar mistakes you need to work on, also as has been stated before I doubt there would be an accurate way to measure a hostile entity such as this one. Also, you may want to add some [EXPLETIVE] on the interview log, this is a serious scientific article and must appear as such even on the interview logs.
While this article tells a very poggers story, I think that the protocols could add that teams of ASF personnel of 2 or more are to be stationed on certain points of the site to guarantee that even if someone enters alone they are not in danger and the containment of the monster is easier.
Pogchamp article, it won 5 gold medals… I mean stars.
Ok it’s good the thing is you never state what exactly happens when someone is alone it’s obvious they die but how? Even if you made that obvious to you still have to state it in the description. And what about humanoid rpcs?
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