Constructive criticism: You mention the rage state twice and it comes off as a bit awkward.
Other than that good one!
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(account deleted)I really like the fact that you didn't use amnestics. Keep it up.
Just a tiny correction, in the experiment log:
Subject: D-5987 (Asian, female, 23 years old) and D-5661 (Black, female, 17 years old)
Results: RPC-163-2 entered rage state upon visual contact with subjects, attacking D-1989 first.
No subject D-1989 was detailed before, just 5987 and 5661.
I've detected several grammatical and tonal errors. Will elaborate if you ask for some clarification.
Interesting concept and execution dragged down by the tone. 3 now.
This article is superb, why would it be at 3.7? It's baffling when it is 5 star material.
Much better than the movie.
Although I personally dislike the use of the "rage state" term, the concept and execution are both really good
4/5
You got a solid solid article here, but two main criticisms come to mind:
It used too many CSD's as cattle to be slaughtered. I would at the very least, elaborate further on what happened to the dumbass who suggested putting a child inside the testing chamber.
Two, as many said, rage state. Why? It looks silly
The image does help elevate the article a lot, it's creepy as hell. I'll give this one a 4 star, it could easily be a five if not for how dated it is.
This both scary and very good article.
I love horror with both Christian and Catholic stuff in it.
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