RPC-048 is a grotesque portal
grotesque makes it sound like it's going to be made of flesh, and is also iffy tone.
contains a multitude of additional statues of various sizes
'additional' is redundant, and you use 'of' twice in a row.
Are the statues made of stone? by 'sapient' figures you mean humanoid statues? are they clearly artistic?
When an object is placed inside of the mouth of RPC-048 a gravitational anomaly accelerates the object towards the interior of the cavern.
missing a comma after 048.
Having traveled approximately 18 meters into the passage the object disappears into an opaque darkness, and is classified as RPC-048-1
the wording of this sentence makes it sound like the opaque darkness is 048-1, because you refer to the darkness as it's own noun. You should clarify beforehand that any person or object entering 048 is 048-1, so you can easily refer to them from the beginning.
and what exactly is 'opaque darkness'?
This hum continues until a code word or phrase has been spoken within the area encompassed by the surrounding statues, at which point it ceases.
What happens if you try to put another object in the portal?
these statues are just placed haphazardly around the portal in the stone, right
- From there on in the article, I actually appreciate the thought you put into the guidelines behind passcodes. I was also going to say that using this for storage seems risky by itself, but I realized you could have expendable humans say the passcode instead of an agent.
- The experiment log was actually kind of funny, but the incident after that is straight up idiotic. Bit of a weird contrast to the mystery and gore that happened before it, if you ask me.
Intelligence agents later reported that a small boy in Ireland had died of a freak accident, being impaled through his head by a log while in his room playing with his stuffed animals.
I thought it was implied you had to be near the hole to retrieve the item, but anyone can say a passcode anywhere? That sounds like it should have been in the description.
In fact, this article could be a bit better if you had the Authority have the same misconception I did. What if, during testing, they have a hazardous item kill someone far away for the FIRST time asthe final incident? It'd be a better twist and it'd feel like the Authority and reader are getting surprised at the same time, instead of including a head-in-ass agent do something stupid. If you don't want to include more info in the description about how passcodes work anywhere, it can easily be thrown on as a discovery during experimentation at the end.
Downvote for now, but this can improve.