RPC-025
Like the image for the object, and the description and test logs were pretty neat, overall a solid article.
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turns eyeballs into molten lead
Upvoted for this sentence alone, though there are some tone problems and the last addendum feels rushed and kind of incoherent.
Updooted for fun concept and good execution. The only problems i saw, Von Pincer has already stated them.
BTW, are you planning to make the Extended Addendum accessible? I'd like to see what people come up with.
(account deleted)I think that this is overall a very cute read, it's not too long and holds the attention of the reader. However, I am confused why the subjects chosen to wear the glasses are called "tributes", to me this feels like you wanted a way to make the glasses seem more sinister and that calling people who wear them tributes was an easy way to do so. I understand that someone has to wear them each month, but I don't understand why "subject" wouldn't do instead.
Good premise but fell very short on delivery. The RPC's manner of choosing victims could be better explored and made more concise — it's as if the writer themselves can't decide what to put down, and ultimately I'm left confused. The manner of the RPC's "self-restoration" could be better explained, too. Is it impervious to damage? Does it simply reform itself? What happens if it's totally obliterated? And lastly, the complete lack of formatting or logic to the unique eye effects is very offputting.
2/5
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