I really like the concept of this one but the article needs a desperate rewrite to fix a bunch of tone/vocabulary issues. +3 for now.
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I'm in agreement here. I could see this being a 4 with a bit of rewriting.
Not a bad one, I actually enjoyed it but could use some rewording on some paragraphs
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Debriefing could be used better here, and outside of the wording of the paragraphs being changed it's an interesting one.
Forgot to mention this should still be part of 040 and not it's own article, imo.
With Hellsverg's permission, and because I've always had a soft spot for this article, I have made substantial updates and edits to the content of RPC-049. Please take this into consideration when re-reading the article.
The picture belongs to Farm Security Administration / Office of War Information Photograph. However, it has no known copyright info, thus it's in public domain.
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I pronounce "pineapples" like I do "Minneapolis."
The biggest issue that the article has is that it possesses a substantial amount of clinical description relating to how to behave and contain the anomaly with almost no payoff within the rest of the article. There is a shallow delve in what kind of person Neuman was, the incident that creates a sort of confusion who was at fault (or rather what we're supposed to think who was at fault) and the worst offender would be that the conclusion to the article, no matter how expected or simple was at the beginning.
I think this article should either be moved to its "parent" one or vice versa with some modification and the story and its characters expanded. Now, it just feels like icing on a wheat cake and a fair attempt to improve the story.
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