A Whole New World

Summary:

A combination of several ideas: a multiversal organisation that bops around the multiverse in an extradimensional pocket universe created in response to a multiversal force or threat going around conquering, killing, etc.

A Whole New World

Rational Gaze 06 May 2025 20:48

As the summary states, multiversal travelers in a mobile extra-dimensional pocket universe working to stop the total eradication/conquering of all life in the multiverse and the hands of some evil dudes. They happen across a world being invaded and rescue a guy who is on the verge of death and turn him into a cyborg. They then continue bopping around, fighting aforementioned 'bad guys'. Could be it's own thing, but could be an RPC thing.

Here's the sandbox:
http://rpcsandbox.wikidot.com/incoherentscreeching

Apologies in advance if its dogshit.

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Re: A Whole New World

Crazyy8 09 May 2025 18:35

there are essentially two 'versions': the pre-betrayal and post-betrayal version

Punished Venom Snake

Anyway, evening man! Been a while since I last saw ya. Saw this thread and thought I might as well give my critique(I am, after all, certified in critiquing ;) ).

I like the premise. I enjoyed the Metal gear games and the combat/stealth involved, and cyborgs are generally cool. With all the other references to MGS, I think the bridge scene is a bit on the nose. I feel like there could be a bit more story in between when the main character wakes up from being attacked to joining the SVA. Why would he join(besides wanting to fight those who attacked him and his plant/universe)? Could you go into a bit more detail on how everyone travels through the multiverse?

In short, decent concept, some things to work on, good on ya.

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Re: A Whole New World

Rational Gaze 11 May 2025 00:40

Yeah, from what others have said on Discord, I can see focusing on the main character's story and not worrying about the multiverse bit until later is almost certainly the right way to go for now.

I obviously don't want to rip off Metal Gear Solid, but I did want to at least try and pay homage to it, as well as other things that I like and use as inspiration, like Predator, etc.

As for how they travel the multiverse, basically, the extra-dimensional pocket universe is almost like a spaceship that travels through the multiverse.

In my head, I always had the idea of the pocket universe being artificially created and maintained by some kind of device, and that it can physically traverse the multiverse via some multiverse drive.

Then it's simply a matter of creating portals into nearby universes once they are within range. So, the short answer is: anomalous technology.

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