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Dossier for The Flare, may include additional images for the Ships but debating if the Ships will have their own Dossier.
EDIT: Updated Draft 2/3/25, did not implement changes to history yet as Im unsure what to rewrite it as yet.
(I know the images arent working im waiting till the crit is done before I can fix that)
Biology
The internal pressure of a Flare sits at an exorbitant 300 kPa, their form maintained by a rudimentary exoskeleton. Any breach of this exoskeleton risks releasing a stream of a high-pressure sulfuric flame. This effect is exploited by the Flare's physiology in the form of a pressure-release valve on their wrists.
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Alongside studies into the cranial structure of the Flare species was the study into their vision, more importantly, how it differentiates from our own.
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Flare's vision remains remarkably sharp, with a flicker fusion threshold (FFR) currently calculated at 250Hz, which is higher than the galaxy's average. This, in turn, makes a galactic standard day to them seem far longer than to Zidophants such as myself, who only have a un-augmented FFR of 50Hz."
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Technology
Unlike conventional firearms that use a chemical propellant (e.g., black powder or nitrocellulose), it accelerates a projectile utilizing a large-diameter piston in the rear of the rifle. This large-diameter piston is used to force a gaseous, working fluid through a smaller-diameter barrel containing the projectile to be accelerated through super-heated gas contained within the barrel.
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The weapon utilizes depleted uranium cartridges, typically seven grams in weight, filled with solidified sodium. The contents of the cartridge are super-heated and broken down into base components using the built-in Plasma Gasifier. These cartridges are then launched out and 'catch' the plasma contained within the barrel, appearing as a bright-orange 'fireball' when fired, due to the sodium within the cartridge igniting upon ejection.
Though the temperature of the initial arc is exceptionally high (∼13,000°C), the temperature downstream within the plasma gasifier, where waste products are brought in contact with it, is much cooler (2700–4500°C).
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Another notable piece of non-organic technology utilized by The Flare is their 'flash-training' devices. No opportunity has presented itself at this time to study the inner workings of this process due to these devices being kept a top military and strategic secret by The Flare. What has been confirmed, is that said Flash Training is capable of fully educating a juvenile Flare in the ways of their combat including military combat, close quarters combat and naval combat.
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-as each sub-species is expected to know and focus on certain knowledge compared to their peers.
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FTL Technology
An essential aspect of Flare technology is utilizing a 'Superposition Drive .'This unique form of FTL travel allows The Flare to effectively 'teleport' within a confined 'bubble '-like radius generated and constantly maintained by the Superposition Drive. This instantaneous regional transmission enables the Flare to utilize unconventional defense tactics involving randomized system sweeps and ship-to-ship suicide bombers.
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In summary, the Superposition Drive is a large, spherical containment device and power generator that creates anomalous 'phantom particle pairs'. When a couple is created, one of the two will be emitted. This particle will exist in a superposition around the drive. The longer the Superposition Drive has to emit particles, the greater the potential travel radius will become. However, these particles can not exceed the speed of light, and the radius will only grow at lightspeed. Due to the effects of the "Whispers Beyond Light", attempts to transport phantom particles outside of their effective radius via other FTL means have resulted in catastrophic incidents.
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Long-Range Scanners have been sent out towards the Ursa Magor III since their first contact, and their reports are.. troubling, to say the least.
While we have been unable to fully confirm the sightings as accurate, the current reports lead credence towards a possible super-structure in possession by the Flare. This would suggest the presence of a Super Position Drive the size of a Dyson Sphere. While believed to be used merely for Transgalactic teleportation, thousands of planets could be wiped out without warning if weaponized.
These reports are currently taken at face value due to the unknown capabilities of The Flare at this time. As such, Galactic Rangers under your jurisdiction are advised against entering Ursa territory until peace talks or a method of sabotaging the Dyson Sphere is established.
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Ships/Vehicles
As stated previously, most Flare tech is biological in nature. Nowhere is this more clear than the living ships of the Flare Navy. Cybernetically augmented, Flare ships can vary in size, typically due to the age of the ship, though their size is more often than not in relation to their utilization and deployment. Due to the organic nature of their ships and their plentiful production, each Flare commanding officer is typically assigned a personal ship, with said officers typically maintaining the same respect and devotion to their ship that they would share with their own soldiers, both due to a personal attachment to said ships over years of combat, as well as the pilots of said ships syncing their minds neurologically to said ships.
Observed Flare ships can be categorized by three distinct sub-species.
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A Sunspot craft signifies a system's occupation by Flare. Coming in at a whopping 3,000km in diameter, the vessel is aptly named and responsible for housing all troops, arms, ships, and FTL drives for a military campaign.
A Mobile command center in its own right, these 'Sunspot' vessels vary from their counterparts by utilizing technology on their surface far more than their occupants. The exterior is a gunmetal gray with silver accents. Samples obtained from the only encountered 'Sunspot' vessel have shown the exterior to be an aluminum-alloy plating, with a material similar to a graphite-epoxy present underneath the aluminum-alloy plating. Under this plating, an organic, keratin-like wall composes the main body of the vessel, similar to other organic ships produced by The Flare9.
These 'Sunspot' vessels are often loaded with thousands of cryogenic stasis pods, which help to induce the Flare within into a cryosleep, providing them an environment that allows their bodies to be self-sustained. During interstellar travel, the Sunspot ship is fully automated via a semi-organic artificial intelligence. This pseudo-autopilot are turned off shortly before combat or rendezvousing with a heavenly body.
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History
The story of the Flare people has been obfuscated, sometimes intentionally. Tales and religious accounts of the Flare-burning worlds date back an epoch. How truthful these stories may be is to be determined. An overwhelming amount of rumors and conflicting information muddles their history. Added by malicious acts of record destruction, a definitive origin of The Flare cannot be determined at this time. What can be agreed on is a collection of corroborating claims sourced from across the Galaxy. Unfortunately, most of the actual information on the Flare has been kept secret by the Consortium. Acquiring the full data set is possible but has been tied up in a lengthy subscription plan with an initial and substantial down payment.
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Note: Flare "Ancient History" here is not ancient; as you've already stated, their history goes back an Epoch. Thus, stuff that happened only a couple thousand years ago is modern for them and the timespan of the cosmos. Therefore, the following section, "Ancient History," should focus on the accounts of really ancient aliens (700,000 to 100,000 years ago, such as the Karza, Kymen, Wayxers, Selohssa, and possibly Hopkins. Also, rereading this, I prefer the old section, as their journey ties in more with why they want the precursor DNA, creating a solid narrative through-line. You can reintroduce bits of that lore by using the abovementioned aliens and their ancient historical accounts.
Ask me for a critique when you're done, and I'll redo my crit.
Culture and Psychology
While believed to be capable of longer lifespans, Flare, due to their aggressive and militaristic view on life, have shown a lifespan on average smaller than humans; with Worker drones showing a 5-15 year average lifespan, Grease Bugs showing a 10-20 year average lifespan, and Incinerators displaying a 5-10 year lifespan.
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Memories stored within the Archive are typically used for specific purposes, such as the continuation of projects, inheriting specialized skillsets or beneficial mutations not generalized enough for flash training implementation.
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Older Flare typically have the lived experience and tactical mindset of a seasoned veteran; though, without the morality typically seen with contemporary species to hold them back.
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Roles and Ranks
Sketch of Worker under employ of Symbol-Zastępczy Co, their Combat Suit removed.
The Worker Drone is the most common variant and most Humanoid in appearance. Bi-pedal and standing at 5'10, Workers possess three fingers on each hand. The exoskeleton of the Workers is covered in a rubber-like composite.
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Typically on par with human intelligence, The Flare possess the intellectual capabilities to adapt and counterattack in battle at an astonishing speed, a speed normally associated solely with humans. It is important to keep this in consideration when engaging with The Flare in a Naval or Infantry engagement; If you devised a method to counter-attack, assume they have already considered it.
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While more uncommon, especially in active combat areas, the 'Grease Bug' are a sub-species of Flare grown for a dedicated role as the mechanic of the species, their physiology similar on a genetic level but drastically different from an outward appearance, most notably being their arachnid build, with four legs serving as transportation and two arms serving for motor skills.
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Commonly, they are shorter, roughly 5'2 on average and possess more minor, less developed burn glands on their shoulders while also containing five fingers instead of the expected three; their similar jaw structure would suggest they are also omnivorous.
They possess an above average intelligence on par with humans and construct most of the species' machinery while also maintaining the majority of scientific endeavors in their society.
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In most cases, Incinerators possess less intelligence than their brethren but have enough not to be simple wild beasts. There are, however, rare cases where Incinerators show intelligence above even the grease bugs. However, only a single instance of a highly intelligent incinerator has been reported, as research is ongoing regarding the species and whether this is a singular outlier or more indicative of a slow change of the species.
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Government / Diplomatic Procedures
One of these three central leaders is then chosen to lead their people into the future during their tenure, which typically lasts until the Flare in question dies of natural causes or is killed in combat.
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Due to being the example all Flare currently strive towards, his tactics, rules of engagement, and war policy are disseminated and taught to all Flare shipped off to fight. He also has final say in the event that the other two representatives cannot come to an agreement when discussing various subjects in regards to their people.
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Flare within the Milky Way are typically assigned as bodyguards to high-ranking Symbol-Zastępczy Co members, or as hired muscle, sent to various worlds by Symbol-Zastępczy Co in the event that peaceful negotiations fall through.
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While The Flare tend to avoid the path of GRPC ships, they have been known to fire on any ship, GRPC or GT, that approach too close to Consortium space. GD-FRONT, despite her near death experience with The Flare during the Bonfire War, has been active in several diplomatic missions regarding the Flare, attempting to, with little success thus far, persuade the Flare to be allies.
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I will be ignoring grammatical criticisms for this review as I believe there is a bigger issue at hand here. The article is simply boring. This is nothing more than a massive lore dump with no entertainment value whatsoever, and information held within is not particularly interesting.
It doesn't stand out from other alien races within Sci-Fi worlds. A few I thought of off the top of my head are the Pfhor from Marathon, the Genosians from Star Wars, and the Government section of the article just radiates Warhammer 40k inspiration. While there is nothing wrong with being inspired by these or any source, this is more of a rehash of their concepts rather than doing something new with them.
Another major issue this article lacks are the "personal spices" that compliment document style articles such as The Report on Turkmenistan and Uncommon Diseases. In addition to having more interesting information held within, the addition of content from in-universe characters updating or reacting to the information within adds to the article. In your case, I believe one thing you could do, would be to add a brief entry detailing first contact with the Flare's. This would, in my opinion, add more to the article.
Lastly, your images are broken. Discord is not a file hosting platform, use the sandbox or site when you can.
