Cosmic Embers tale: "Black Veil Protocol"

Cosmic Embers tale: The Soviets, the Path, the Pirates and the Black Veil

Capitano Nox 23 Mar 2023 13:47

http://rpcsandbox.wikidot.com/capitano-nox-grpc

Edit: Sorry guys, you'll have to wait a bit more. I was recommended to expand this.

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Re: Cosmic Embers tale: Protocol "Black Veil"

Cosmic Cosmonaut 23 Mar 2023 20:16

protocol "black veil" seems weird to my english eyes wouldn't "black veil protocol" be better."let's answer to what likely is" might want to change that to "what is likely"."I imagine you probably" might want to change to "I imagine you have have probably". "branch of our organization to carry out some operations" change to "branch of our organization that carries out some operations"."Blue Book since a while' change 'since' to 'for'."does the dirty job for them" change work to job (it sounds more natural)."that more than once caused" put the word 'has' between that and more."troubles to the Rangers" change 'to' to 'for' and drop the s from troubles."why we have to be so secret" change to secretive."so, again," i think you can drop the comma between so and again."I can however talk you" talk to*."especially that protecting us from nasty psychic aliens, so be grateful to them." change to "especially when it comes to protecting us from nasty psychic aliens, so be grateful to them."." can wait for when you'll be at our headquarter" change to "cant wait for you to join us at our headquarters". " Think well whether" replace 'well' with 'about'.

Last edited on 23 Mar 2023 20:17 by Cosmic Cosmonaut Show more