RPC-XXX's perimeter is to be enclosed by 3m tall chainlink fencing and routinely guarded by security personnel under the guise of anti-looting custodians. A small OL-Site facility has been built in proximity to RPC-XXX to house personnel, resources, and archeological equipment. Trespassers to the site are to be detained and transported to the OL-Site for interrogation. The ruins of RPC-XXX are to be maintained and inspected annually.
Very nitpick but, why is the fence so tall? Is that just standard height for fences like this? Idk, just seems too tall
Onto the more important bit, I feel the coverup could be improved. Rather than saying people are there to just stop looting, I’d suggest the cover story be that RPC-XXX is an active archeological site. Would justify Authority infrastructure and equipment which would otherwise look overkill to just keep out looters. And it also isn’t entirely a lie as the place is/was being actively swept for artifacts and structures of significance.
RPC-XXX-1 material is to be transported to the Cold Storage Wing at Site-██ for future inspection.
Generally shouldn’t redact containment protocols. Looks sloppy. Just pick the nearest biological or research facility as sites specifically don’t really matter half the time.
RPC-XXX was a sedentary culture that occupied a local 3300m2 area along the ████ River, in Utah, between 1400-1300 BC. Though superficially reminiscent of neighboring Fremont and Ancestral Puebloan sites, RPC-XXX possesses architectural and artistic motifs which predate both cultures by 300 years.
Various items, jewelry, clothing, and other assorted pieces of regalia belonging to the ruling caste can be found inside individual stone tombs, though all graves excavated thus far reveal no visible human remains.
Shortens up the sentence a bit and makes it easier to read as regalia can be used as just a blanket term by itself without the need for examples.
Nothing further to really say about this whole segment of the description. Would suggest you find a way to squish these paragraphs together though. Preferably into just one or two. One for RPC-XXX proper, its time, society and composition, and one for the graves, DNA, and notes on the artifacts.
During its lifetime, RPC-XXX-1 weighed ~19.6 kL, and occupied half of the cavity.
Any living being that has been produced by RPC-XXX-1 is designated RPC-XXX-A. Through the measurements of middens used by RPC-XXX, it is calculated RPC-XXX-1 has produced aprox. 2████ RPC-XXX-A instances during its lifetime, indicating RPC-XXX-1 possessed the ability to replicate itself. It is currently impossible to determine how much matter RPC-XXX-1 was capable of regenerating.
This is kinda clunky. The fact that it can produce organisms isn't really introduced so much as just thrown onto the reader. Feels, abrupt. I'd suggest changing this paragraph to more smoothly transition into the RPC-XXX-A segment of the description. Perhaps start with the conditions that cause this or start by describing the process by which they're made, then start talking about the things. Example:
Periodically, RPC-XXX-1 would produce independent organisms from its mass. The mechanics of this process remains unknown. After an organism, hereby designated an instance of RPC-XXX-A, had fully developed, RPC-XXX-1 would regenerate the expended mass. Measurements of middens within RPC-XXX indicate that approximately 2████ were produced by RPC-XXX-1 during its life.
Common artistic depictions among pottery and murals of RPC-XXX feature a singular, large humanoid figure (most likely a chief or figurehead) encompassed by an outward spiral of RPC-XXX-A specimens, flanked by a line of smaller figures. It is hypothesized RPC-XXX's ruling caste had some form of control over RPC-XXX-1.
I feel this should be moved, maybe to earlier in the description. Feels weird where it currently is. Feels like interrupts the flow.
The lack of RPC-XXX-A supply provoked a severe crisis among RPC-XXX. Extensive damage was inflicted on infrastructure among all 4 hamlets, with some patterns resembling intraethnic violence, while others denoting plundering by nomadic groups. Shortly thereafter, all RPC-XXX settlements were completely abandoned. Local Paiute groups adjacent to RPC-XXX ruins have not interacted with the site in any form, believing it to be haunted and a portent of bad luck.
I'd suggest you try to do the same type of shortening I suggested for the first section. As it stands, much of the description is very wordy and bloated. Would suggest a paragraph about RPC-XXX-1's description, RPC-XXX-A's description, RPC-XXX-A/-1 interaction with RPC-XXX, and one for how everything went to shit for RPC-XXX.
Additionally, I question how the exact nature of conflict can be told from the patterns of damage. Perhaps some simple writings or drawings were found that gave clues to them being ethnic and nomadic raiding in nature? I don't know, I'm not an archeologist. There's also the issue of redundant details such as the multiple mentions of the malformed organs and RPC-XXX-A being used as a food source.
Addendum XXX-1
The addendum is fine but I wonder what it contributes. It seems implied that RPC-XXX did something to a foreigner like feeding them to the pit? Human sacrifice, if that’s what this is, is notable. But, I just wonder what exactly it contributes to the article overall.