Having successfully test-flew prototypes
Should be changed to past participle flown
(solved with later designs)
Using in sounds more smoothly than with, but that's a personal take
Administration's attitude towards the aircraft changed in the late 1980s
I feel the notion that Administration's attitude changed favorably could be a bit more clear
Their limited numbers meant they could only be stored only 3 sites worldwide
they could only be stored in 3 sites worldwide
witnesses could identity
witnesses could identify
This flexibility makes the MK4 a staple aircraft at any site that are capable of hosting them
Changing it to "any site capable of hosting them" makes it smoother imo
laser and guided munitions
I'm not familiar with Protection lore or its level of technology, so I'm unsure if this means "MK4 has laser weaponry and guided minuitions" or it is a typo of "laser-guided munitions"
with a record time of 3 minutes and 12 seconds by pilot "River Hawk" of Site-305.
This is merely a suggestion considering I don't know anything about military monikers, but putting a redacted name between the nickname may sound better than standalone "River Hawk"
has been designed as an cybernetics-based control board
designed as a cybernetics-based control board
Machine Intelligence engages live communication with the pilot to perform complicated aeronautic maneuvers
"Intricate" or something along the lines could work better than complicated
it remains with the pilot to make and take responsibility for the decisions circumstance demands with the time and knowledge their equipment and their experience may provide.
I'm not sure if it's lack of comprehension on my part or not, but I had a difficult time trying to comprehend this sentence. Avoiding a double "and" sentence would go a long way. Were you meaning to write something like "take responsibility for the decisions each circumstance demands with the proficiency their equipment and training may provide"?
Certainly a well-put and interesting article, it doesn't feel like a dense college homework assignment one has the misfortune to read through, which is already a noteworthy achievement when it comes to RPC documents. For this I have to agree with gismo that it was a pleasant surprise.
Simultaneously, it maintains a professional tone from start to end. The development of the VTOL vehicle that would end up being Oluja is distinctly true to life, which makes me wonder on what document material or historical project you could've based it on.
I must admit that, while it was hardly something that took me off completely from the read, the HMACS section was a bit overwhelming for me. A re-read cleared the confusion, and I don't doubt it's more a lack of reading comprehension than anything, but I'd still want to take note of it just in case.