MinCon2023 - Sammy the Saucer
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Summary:
He'll steal your shit
Object Class: Omega-White (UC)1
I imagine this is for Mincon, and if so I'd say the uncontained footnote is unnecessary, and it'll knock off 10 points for you.
Personnel are to additionally be advised to remove any important or valued items from their person should they encounter it. Personal items will not be compensated for and loss of Authority property will result in standard punishment.
I don't think losing authority property would be punishable if you are the victim of an RPC that specifically takes things from people. I'm also confused as to why they are not making efforts to capture or attack or really do anything to this saucer, which, judging by the end of the article, is at best a nuisance, at worst an active detriment to authority activities.
Maybe also add something about agents in the Pacific being required to being extra clothing and Authority ships in that area being stocked more than others.
Note: Referring to RPC-385 as "Sammy" will not be tolerated in commanding/administrative personnel. Such unprofessional behavior isn't allowed.
haha lol the authority is so random and funny! This isn't important, useful or interesting. It doesn't even make a lot of sense in the article since I doubt the personnel would give a funny nickname to the saucer you can't locate and steals your shit. it's like giving a pet name to the guy who robbed your house.
No means of propulsion is visible on it but it is nonetheless able to accomplish speeds of up to 350 km/h.
they're just able to eyeball that? I imagine any kind of speed capturer would fit under motion detecter
As such, it can only be identified via the naked eye, however, its propensity to maintain a distance of no less than 3 kilometers from human subjects makes this difficult.
I imagine you could still use binoculars or a telescope right? if not I have no idea how the authority can make judgements on its appearance.
When a subject becomes aware of RPC-385’s presence within their area, they become an instance of RPC-385-A
I wouldn't make them some sort of sub-anomaly. there's nothing anomalous about the people getting their shit stolen from them.
RPC-385 will follow RPC-385-A instances until each has terminated or the instances approach land, at which point it will vacate the area.
I feel like you could expand upon this a bit, like if a subject is terminated or approaches land without losing focus of RPC-385 would they still lose the object? What if the person loses focus and they don't have anything on them? what if somebody takes the only object their holding while they shift focus away from 385? so on so forth
Of note, when a hat of any kind disappears from a RPC-385-A instance, RPC-385 will radio broadcast (Cheery?) music played by unknown instruments over a 8 km radius.
I imagine the blue (Cheery?) implies you're looking for a tonally relevant phrase in place of that word. I'd say something along the lines of "broadcast unknown music similar to songs that have a sanguine mood. Songs consist of purely instrumental tracks, although the instruments used have not been identified yet.
By radio broadcast, do you mean it sends out a radio signal playing these songs? if so, how were they able to detect that? How do they know the range of the radio signal if they can't track the saucer?
103 barrels (contents left behind)
like large wooden barrels? (or metal ones same difference) I don't see how 103 different authority personnel were in a position to notice the saucer while also carrying a heavy object like that around. if it's something else, I would specify that.
Overall, its a fine article, but it really needs some expansion on the ideas. There are a lot of hints that there's something else about this saucer that the Authority and readers don't know and you do, but it doesn't feel like it would lead anywhere interesting at this point. there's so many ways you could play with this, an experiment log, a discovery section. what if somebody was having a video call when they had the saucer take their stuff?
All personnel operating within the limits of the Pacific Ocean are to be alerted to the existence and nature of RPC-385.
Patrols that encounter the anomaly are not to pursue it.
It is circular in shape and smooth across its surface.
No means of propulsion are visible on the object's exterior, but it is nonetheless capable of extreme speeds and maneuverability; its maximum speed is unknown at this time.
motion detectors, RADAR, audio-visual recorders, etc.
As such, it can only be identified through the naked eye and mechanical, magnification tools such as binoculars and telescopes.
I am not sure if you need to mention it.
RPC-385 possesses a localized infohazardous property.
after multiple failed attempts at communication.
No effect was observed as RPC-385 avoided all volleys fired by the vessel.
3 Protection pilots
Consult with Lore expert, but I am pretty sure that RPC has their own airforce with a specific name.
Overall, it was a pretty fan article. I have pointed out all the SPaG and flow tissues I found.
One thing I would recommend is showing the RPC-385 do something with all those items it has collected. It could give the reader a little clue towards its nature without spoiling it.
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