RPC-919 / Discussion

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The Son of Man 17 Dec 2022 23:53

MinCon2023 Submission

Draft Critique Forum: http://rpcauthority.wikidot.com/forum/t-15468187/minicon-paper-airplane#post-5768446

I would like to thank Unknown_Chan, BetterMyButter does not match any existing user name, and EpicGamer42069 for reviewing my draft.

Last edited on 17 Dec 2022 23:55 by The Son of Man Show more

televisionist 18 Dec 2022 05:44

I'm rating this a three less because there's something I dislike about the article and more about the absence of an idea. I guess it's cute, and there doesn't have to be a murder involved in every RPC, but, what was the point? I barely get what the note's saying.

There's not enough to rate it higher or give it a three. At best, this is a Lesser Object.

Update: Have been informed what it is, I was overthinking the concept: That being said, I think it's very flat for an article otherwise.

Last edited on 20 Dec 2022 21:15 by televisionist Show more

TheGreatTarbolin69 20 Dec 2022 20:38

It's a cool little anomaly and a nice example of show don't tell with the last note and how it can be extracted, with all the clues we've been given, that it was written in East Berlin during the Col War. I still think it was a little uneventful to merit the creation of an anomaly. If you could give, idk, give some more "spice" to the end it could make the whole thing more well-rounded.

Would give it a 3.5 if I could.

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Almarduk 21 Dec 2022 21:09

Pretty damn cute. The idea of this paper plane somehow crossing the seas to sightsee is cool but the plain matter-of-fact presentation hurts it. It's fine as it is, otherwise — giving it too much more would probably ruin the simplicity of it.