A three meter tall fence has been installed around the perimeter of RPC-XXX's active zone, deemed OL-Site-XXX.
How large is that perimeter? It's easy to assume it's referring to RPC-XXX's radius, however, I can clearly see a road behind RPC-XXX. Wouldn't it be weird if a cyclist road had a big fence surrounding a fence? How would you explain that? I would like some form of clarification for this, as short as you need it be, but as long as it makes things clear.
RPC-XXX is a square "No Bicycling" sign, fastened to the ground by a metal pole.
That's it? I understand you're going for minimalism, but this is almost just as unpolished as single-sentence containment protocols. My suggestion, something as simple as ''it's located at [X], a road/cycling track in [Y].'' should do the trick. You could even redact the last part if you deem it irrelevant (which it kinda is)
Result: Subject reported a sense of unease after ten minutes.
Would work better if we get a specific detail of what kind of unease. The previous log worked just fine because we can all relate to groin pain, but this part is kinda odd. I suggest you restructure the sentence so that whatever specific kind of uneasyness the subject reports, it can be felt (could be paranoia, delusions, or a simple ''Im being watched'' kinda thing).
Trial was aborted nine minutes in, as subject complained of dizziness vertigo, nausea, and shortness of breath. Subject would eventually vomit. After one week, all effects subsided.
The middle does not read well off the tongue (I mean maybe it's just a skilled issue because lol ESL but still). It doesn't feel impactful, and I do believe it's a poor use of the Past Simple tense. Suggestion, find a way to describe someone puking that really shows it
Result: Subject recoiled in shock upon attempt, reporting a jolt of pain across his body. Trial was aborted.
Minor suggestion, would've been better if you noted that the subject fell to the ground upon receiving the shocking pain.
One minute and 29 seconds into Trial XXX-05, RPC-XXX suddenly exploded detonated. 12 subjects were injured by flying shrapnel. The debris shows no anomalous properties, and RPC-XXX is considered neutralized.
Were they fatally injured? It would have been hilarious if they got shrapnel on their groin, one last ''fuck you'' before the anomaly went down. Or, if the shrapnel got all over their hands and feet, hell, if one guy would've gone blind that would-I'm getting to ahead of myself. Point is, as it is, it's not very impactful and I don't really feel like this sign said ''well fuck all of you'' before killing itself.