Well, there you have it. It took me a bit longer than expected but at this point this is just to be expected.
Crit thread: http://rpcauthority.wikidot.com/forum/t-15017999/rpc-321-crit-thread
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I really liked the concept of this article, certainly a longer article but very good for what it has to offer. I believe that this article is an amazing example of what can be written when a good idea is expanded upon.
+4 Very Good
Very easy +4, I enjoyed the read. Could probably use moving the image of the actual phenomena up a bit as an eye-catcher, but that's up ta you.
It's a fine article, good anomaly, at times humorous, but it does irk me that the article goes off on a tangent to say "yeah this is what's going on". I think I'd like the second part better if it was on its own, but also the first part wouldn't really work without it, I dunno. There's not really a way to "fix" it, but I can't rate it any higher than a 3.
This is a huge upgrade over the original version you had previously uploaded for the Broader Horizons contest. It removed my biggest issues with the article which I appreciate greatly. However, I agree with Tomato's critique where it goes on and on and on explaining how it works.
What redeems that for me is that instead of just being a boring science lesson, you play to your strong suit which is dialogue. You manage to keep my attention and prevent the final selection from feeling twice its length which many articles with dialogue on this site tend to do. Now, while I did state that I am not a fan of the "note at the end which explains everything" trope that the previous version of this article fell victim to, you managed to spin that on its head and create something far more interesting. My ranking comes out to a 4/5
Alright, so I have some problems with the execution. At first, it's a nametag which makes people want to constantly introduce themselves, as well as making that the only thing they can do. Then it explains how this happens using memotics. This is where the major hiccup is, as explaining something as vague as "gnatdraffs" In the middle of the article just, doesn't work. The anomaly itself a bit too uninteresting to entice the reader too continue reading and hopefully understanding. The recording at the end was interesting to read through, but it once again explains something which I really didn't find all that intriguing to begin with. The humor isn't my style either, neither in the dialogue nor in the text itself, but that's obviously a very subjective matter.
All in all, the ending wasn't especially exiting nor was the read itself provoking. 2/5
I feel like the humor of this article goes over my head and the concept doesn’t make much sense to me.
I’m reviewing this after reading through a few of Alma’s articles and while I usually don’t understand those either, there’s enough substance there and the content is enjoyable enough for me to want to understand it, even if it’s really weird and pagan or whatever.
But I don’t want to understand this. I don’t want to reread the woman eating her own menstrual pad (???) and the random weirdo who donates anomalies to the Authority (???) in order to figure it out and even though I understand it’s supposed to be shock value, making an article intentionally unpleasant makes it… unpleasant.
Interestingly, the article itself is gnatdraff, as I understand it. But something being stupid ironically is still stupid. Why am I reading this file instead of spending time with my loved ones? Two stars.
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