Carousel Notepad / Discussion

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thatowldude 26 Apr 2022 05:14

baphoid……………… YOU HAVE FINALLY POSTED YOUR ARTICLE

Von Pincier 26 Apr 2022 11:47

And he didn't link the crit thread!

thatowldude 26 Apr 2022 15:50

goofy ahh mf

!1

BBTBaphomet 26 Apr 2022 22:04

Howdy Von, We've got it right here
http://rpcauthority.wikidot.com/forum/t-14593045/consider-this-tale

0ktober 26 Apr 2022 21:36

This is probably the most accurate take on beurocratic writing ever posted to the site. It feels like real legalese and it's very immersive. The dialogue is also very natural and enjoyable to read. The anomaly itself is very mysterious and intriguing; the article is very careful not to give many details, which keeps a compelling mystery but still feels justified because it's in-character for a government organization to be utterly terrible at providing a straight forward and comprehensive description.

However, this article has a lot of typos such as grammar and punctuation errors. It really brings down the article for me, especially toward the end when it made the dialogue a bit difficult to parse. I rated 3 stars but I think this article would be a 4 star with more proofreading.

BBTBaphomet 26 Apr 2022 22:06

Howdy Vizlox. I've touched base with a few others regarding your latter notice. While I was able to note a couple things with the assistance of ol' Google, I am curious to the extent of what you noticed. Shoot me a DM where possible.

0ktober 26 Apr 2022 23:59

Maybe in a few weeks I'll do a line-by-line but namely there are issues with unneeded spaces before commas, missing periods at the end of sentences, and mixing up its and it's. Only ever use "it's" when you are using the shorthand for "it is".