Gluttony

Summary:

The Embodiment of Gluttony

Gluttony

LogoLogo 18 Feb 2022 05:07

I've been working on this for a while. This is a creature that is the Embodiment of Gluttony. One of the seven deadly sins, entities that want to punish us for the sins we committed against the divine. It has unique characteristics such as:

A large flabby body.

4 black eyes that move like a chameleon's giving it a 360 degree view of its surroundings.

A large mouth that's like a black hole.

Six strong legs that provide great maneuverability and speed.

Also, if you're within 4 meters of it, you'll consume food and drink til you choke to death.

This monster however is just one of the 7 horrors that will do anything to get to our world. This entity however doesn't like being around the other sins. It hates them and would devour them if it were the strongest one.

Re: Gluttony

Almarduk 18 Feb 2022 23:47

First I'd like to point out that creatures/objects that make you so mad you self-destruct are generally not seen well — there's a lot of them and it's a very old trope. There's other ways to make your entity scary and impressive. For instance…

• Tetractomorph has a fairly interesting background and "gimmick" related to classic science and philosophy.
• Beast of No Nation isn't particularly interesting concept-wise, but its description, implications and the allegory it conveys carry the article.
• Bestial Gift of the Behemoth and the Third Reich relies on a fairly goofy gimmick that is later subverted for heavy-hitting horror.
• To Sleep Like an Angel is a pretty basic horror monster in the surface, but the amount of details and their tightness (plus oblique religious references) make it work.

There's plenty of other examples. Garpon, the Spaceship Made of Cows, the Soviet Angel… In general, all of these understand that simply "monsters" isn't quite enough. Either a smart gimmick, or an interesting concept, or a history or background, or novel framing make them work. You can totally get away with just a regular ol' monster — but you should be aware of the weaknesses of monster articles.

In particular, I suggest you dedicate some time to research traditional views and depictions of Gluttony throughout history. It's always great inspiration and helps you represent the topic far more effectively.

Some specific questions:

• Why do they want to punish us? Where do they come from?
• What do you mean by "like a black hole"?
• "Do anything to get to our world"? Are they outside of it?
• Why is it in conflict with the others if they all have the same goal?
• If it wants us to repent, then why does it immediately induce that sin on everyone?

Take these as an opportunity to flesh out the concept if you haven't.

Re: Gluttony

LogoLogo 19 Feb 2022 02:25

Thanks for the advice. If you pm me I can answer many of your questions. I must admit I'm new to this but I also agree it needs work.

Re: Gluttony

Almarduk 19 Feb 2022 02:27

Don't feel discouraged — there's plenty of ways you can make it work! Feel free to PM me if you need help.