HELP

HELP

Fortunae 01 Nov 2021 03:41

HELP CRIT HELP GRUG HELP
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Re: HELP

Almarduk 01 Nov 2021 03:45

> I am thankful, at least, to know that my life is in the hands of Knights belike;

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In a way, I'm a Knight of Spur, too. Only, for my dead golden crown.

- The Man in Red
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wonky code, extra [[/>]] somewhere

Gave most of my crit on Discord, the ending is a little disappointing for my personal tastes but I think it works nicely. I wish the Gunmen had a greater role — I wanted to see more of them. Other than that, it's a nice read, I missed this kinda mystery piece.

Re: HELP

televisionist 01 Nov 2021 03:49

This was a swell article I like it very much. I really like how it mixes body horror with history. My biggest complaint so far is that it feels like an anticlimax at the end, though I get it's supposed to be a monster manual of sorts. But it feels like this eldritch horror and it just kinda goes down without a fight, which I guess ties into the last log but still. Also, the last log: Way too long and sappy. Took me out of the experience. I would shorten it

All long-form crit I gave in DMs about minor spelling. 4 out of five