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The Anomaly Formerly Known as RPC-200

CaptainFormidable 10 Oct 2021 02:22

Let winter come. Let the snow fall and consume…in a shroud of silence. Let everything feel as bound and stifled as my heart.
Rose Tremain

Welp, I'm back, and I've decided to restore some of my old articles. This anomaly used to be designated RPC-200, but I've changed it to RPC-906 because 200 was taken during my absence. If you have any critiques, feel free to post them here. I'd be more than happy to hear them.

Edit: Draft can be found here, draft thread can be found here.

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5/5

The Son of Man 10 Oct 2021 12:38

Minor Issues:

The anomaly is amphibious, and unlike normal snow, does not float on water.

as RPC-906 actively and violently avoids containment efforts.

Re: 5/5

CaptainFormidable 11 Oct 2021 01:03

Fixed it! Thanks for the critique!

Capitano Nox 08 Jun 2023 15:06

Really liked this one. In fact, it's my new favorite RPC. Question though: if RPC-906 reformed after being destroyed, shouldn't it have the regeneration hazard as well?

Raggabrash 03 Apr 2024 04:29

2/5

I don't have much to say about this. It's hardly the worst thing I've ever read on this site, not by a long shot, but it doesn't really grab me. It's just a big snow monster. The discovery log from the civilian is probably the weakest part, which is unfortunate because usually a generic "monster" concept can be saved by a good log and this one was promising - isolated Russian village, mysterious deaths, the works - but it's just brief without any suspense of interesting aspects and had a couple things that jumped out at me while I was reading (mostly nitpicks admittedly). So overall, it's not terrible but it's not better than "not terrible".

Nitpicks

six more men have succumbed to the Flash-Freeze Phenomenon, as they call it. They were all pointing up, like they saw a plane.

Just imagining six guys frozen solid pointing at the sky made me snort. One or two, sure, but six is just a silly image. Not to mention, "Flash Freeze Phenomenon" is a ridiculous thing for regular people to just randomly give to something. It's too artificial sounding.

I only survived because I was doing business out of town.

The way the narrator is describing this makes it sound like the whole "multiple mysterious deaths and a honest to god riot where people attacked the police" was just another Tuesday to him, why DIDN'T he grab his wife and kid and make a run for it? Was he actually planning to come back? I know he said he needed money, but the situation you're describing had kind of gone past the point where that really should have been a priority.

Also what's with the hazards being written out and using the icons? It looks weird as FUCK and I think it messed with the spacing a bit.

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Situation normal, Cap'n! Spiraling out of control!

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