close the
"close this" sounds better
information of
Could also use "information on/about"
Redaction prevents acknowledgment.
What is this supposed to mean? I assume the anomaly might contain a cognitohazard, but I think this instruction should be more clear to the researcher who is reading this document.
[5] Acknowledgment means ██████.
[6] ██████ will always be lethal.
Redacting stuff from containment procedures is generally not a good idea from the perspective in-universe. These warnings are completely unhelpful for any researcher who is reading this document.
RPC-839 has not been moved from its ████ █████.
Oh this is a format screw article. Still my point about redacting stuff from containment procedures stands.
its existence known to the public.
Its existence is known to the public, or its existence cannot be known to the public?
[auditory anomalies]
Why is this information bracketed? Looks kind of strange.
Conscius
Is this supposed to be "Conscious" Labs?
in this floor
"on this floor"
Personnel traversing this floor have claimed to “bump” into things within its hallways.
Are they bumping into non-corporeal things, or can they just not see properly in this environment?
leviathan
I think capitalizing Leviathan makes this sound more threatening since it seems to be a proper noun.
will eyes everywhere
Not sure how I feel about this phrase. Doesn't seem that omnious.
RPC-839 Interview - Recording #1
The Researcher's dialogue here is sort of strange. I don't know what it is exactly, but it doesn't come off as natural.
Leptosiderine
Footnote what this drug is, or what it's supposed to do.
EDIT: Nevermind, it's a Viderics thing. Maybe crosslink to the Viderics guide.
Found among documents pertaining to CNSL.
CNSL?
A transcript of the papers follows:
I feel like this letter could be more schizo-sounding as it gets towards the end, repeating phrases and words and all that. I think it would make the OI sigil at the end come off as more horrifying.
Nuke this nightmare and barren the land where thousands are in agony every second.
I think this is a pretty cool line, not sure why Butter told you to remove it.