Tale
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Tale
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Summary:
I do not write tales.
cautiously as to
cautiously so as to
advise
advice
Ungaurded
Unguarded
exist in this floor
exist on this floor
and once he is done places it is there on the table,
and once he is done, places it on the table,
less to be worried of
worried about
in the letters… it is
in the letters… It is
"Memory was the only thing we forgot with until amnestics came along.
"Memory was the only thing we forgot until amnestics came along.
objects that harm you simply by knowing of them
objects that harm you simply by knowing about them
Our natural inclination is to secure wiring in our brains that cause laziness,
Our natural inclination is to secure the wiring in our brains that causes laziness,
decoupled and decontextualzed in parallel with a fully-aware memory.
decoupled and decontextualized in parallel with a fully-aware memory.
Father Gavrilo if he watches Star Trek as the hallucinogenic compound floods Gödel's synapses which do not let go of them readily.
Father Gavrilo asks if he watches Star Trek as the hallucinogenic compound floods Gödel's synapses which do not let go of them readily.
and Gödel foregoes offense given the debt of reality he experienced and is now coming to terms with.
and Gödel forgoes offense given the debt of reality he experienced and is now coming to terms with.
"Those were't my words," the Father speaks,
"Those weren't my words," the Father speaks,
Very intriguing. I haven't read many of your dialogue heavy works aside from Alpha and Omega, but I can tell you are a master when it comes to using dialogue and keeping the reader hooked the entire time, which is saying a lot when there are several articles on this site with dialogue a quarter the length of this article that are nowhere near as hooking.
Write more tales. 5/5
"Welcome to the Monastery of the Holy Archangels," a staffer greets in a superlative hospitality. The individual is propped neatly in place in the center of the room.
Unsure whether the "a" before "superlative" is correct.
It continues to be lovely, although in a disquieting way.
What does this mean?
They are introduced to the Library of Anomalies and Gödel likes the library rather instantly.
Suggest changing the second "library"
Ungaurded even.
Unguarded
(Why did he imagine there would be?)
Unfinished sentence?
No other criticisms beyond this. Beautiful descriptions and use of Authority lore — I greatly enjoyed the latter half in spite (or maybe because of) the unusual lack of dialogue. This'll be my mental image for viderics now.
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