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Thank you KingWillPower for helping me with the tone of this document, and thank you to those for the helpful crits.
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A suggested change
All previous Containment Protocols for RPC-941-1 have proved unsuccessful. Every attempt to contain RPC-941-1 ends up with it driving through the containment walls or fencing taking no visible damage. Previous containment attempts have been detailed below:
- RPC-941-1 is contained in a 20m x 30m electrified fence topped with Barbed wire across the top.
- RPC-941-1 is contained in a 20m x 30m concrete fencing with a reinforced steel gate.
- RPC-941-1 is to be contained in the sub-basement of Site-092 with concrete, ██████████, and an armed squad of ASF Personnel surrounding it at all times
RPC-941 instances have many different usual or unusual flavors. While some will remain consistent with its described flavor, outliers exist which produce flavors that will have a physical or mental reaction to the human body once consumed.
Should be in the description.
5/5 overall
5/5 premise. Unique enough, based in reality enough, develops further through the article.
5/5 delivery. Good tone. Got a laugh, found it interesting, and good horror.
5/5 grammar. Read easily and quickly.
Loved it.
4/5 overall stars.
Echoing from site members from above: RPC-941 is a rather good read, does not show any repetitive unnecessary wording, and has indeed good tone.
Other than that, RPC-941-1 should perhaps be another RPC object of its own, if that is the case, since RPC-941 is created from inside RPC-941-1.
RPC-941 "instances" of varying flavor should be under the collective instanceship labelled to as an RPC-941-[n] instead.
Anyways, no issue in it.
O/
Charming in concept and execution but with a consistently unserious and quirky tone as to make moments like the "Chalice of Fertility" glib when they really shouldn't be. Dialogue is corny, as is nondiegetic formatting like coloring the cliché meaningless EXPUNGED entry in spooky red or italicizing "still flowing lava" to express wackiness. Individual scenes are all compelling, but the repeat use of censored RPC codes for drama over real stakes is disappointing.
The ending is a cheesy classical stinger and fairly good for that, with even some simple foreshadowing earlier on, though the reliance on an "unidentified entity" of zero description could be improved. Overall, no masterpiece, but a worthwhile read; and the image, though it looks amateurish up close, is a competent and memorable pastiche of the target art style.
Personnel familiar with the phenomenon have posited that Takeshi Inc. may be located in a pocket dimension, a parallel universe, or even possibly the distant future.
On what basis?
flavors that will have a physical or mental reaction to the human body once consumed.
Subjects are backwards ("body" should react to the "flavor").
50 miles
U.S. customary? The horror.
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