Myth & Magic Contest Entry
Something a little simple, just trying to do a bit of a spin on the modern "Goatman" myth and see if I can't give anyone the jibblies from reading it.
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Summary:
the goatman cometh
This is very little that I can say about issues in terms of this article. In some ways, this feels like a poem written in prose, in that sense I really wished you had made this in poem format.
I think what stuck out to me the most was this sentence:
Beyond surviving, making myself not so alone and ugly. Making myself lovable only by finding or creating some poor creature as miserable as me.
That line right there really screams the idea of loss of humanity, attempting to craft a new identity within the now shambling goat-like creature the character has become. It really adds to some of the fear, that the character is just putting up an act appropriate for what he has become. I love it!
While I am not familiar with the Goatman myth I appreciate the newer look into the myth itself, that being a creature wishing to fill in its part! Well done! I hope to see this in the tales section soon. Though, once again, I do recommend that this be written in some poetic format, even if it is just kept in prose.
Dreams. Each man longs to pursue his dream. Each man is tortured by this dream, but the dream gives meaning to his life. Even if the dream ruins his life, man cannot allow himself to leave it behind. In this world, is man ever able to possess anything more solid, than a dream?
~Kentaro Miura
This is really confusing and I dont know of the goatman myth, but its well written and sounds cool
this line stuck with me:
"I live still, wrapped in rusting chain-link bonds with a crumbling edifice keeping me dry in the waning raining days of Spring. But when the sun starts coming out again, I’ll be waiting for it to disappear back to the night. That’s when you can plan on meeting me for the first time, in the flesh."
I wish there was some more time to explain what it is or what the myth is about, but its not a bad article nonetheless
Honestly, I like how this is centered around the Goatman myth, and instead of an article about how much this guy will make you shit your pants, it's a tale about how much this guy will make you shit your pants.
Some of line I really liked were:
"Children squatting over doomed ants, playing God"
"A process-of-elimination approach to making a survivor for a post-nuclear age we all believed could come by dawn. They told us, unblinkingly, that nobody else was regretting how far we had come, insisting that we finish." This one really stuck with me.
"I know what I’m doing is wrong, was wrong, and will be wrong as long as I’m wriggling with my blood inside."
"Walking in to the last room was like the condemned to the gas chamber. Every step made the back foot to weigh on me more heavily than my conscience ever had."
"Dreaming, living, what will become of us?"
"I live still, wrapped in rusting chain-link bonds with a crumbling edifice keeping me dry in the waning raining days of Spring. But when the sun starts coming out again, I’ll be waiting for it to disappear back to the night. That’s when you can plan on meeting me for the first time, in the flesh."
Honestly, this tale blew away my expectations on a whole other level. I really enjoyed reading this one.
Honestly, I'm trying to be as unbiased as possible. I just really liked this one.
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