had always shown a fascination for natural sciences. But those regarding the inner workings of the brain
Replace period with comma.
Soon after completion, David realized the nature of the symbol before falling victim to its effects.
"David realized the nature of the symbol soon after completion, but was unable to avoid falling victim to its effects."
hile vitals showed that David had died at 14:11PM, brain signals in par with those of a healthy human were still being received from his body.
I'd expect a medical team to move David around and remove the flashlight to better attend him before putting equipment on him.
shown success in seizing celular decay.
seizing -> reducing
celular -> cellular
David does not appear to mind its existence.
"David does not appear to mind the existence of the nickname."
Jesus, this is just terrifying at an existential level. Awesome concept with spooky execution — it preys on a deep fear of mine of becoming locked in my body.
1.- The character is fascinating. It achieves a really cool merger of neat concept with obvious effects on personality while giving the opportunity to explore it deeper.
2.- Not sure. I don't think it could provide much to the article.
3.- Abso-fucking-lutely.
