Sup gamer! Lets get into this crit.
Too lazy to do drop downs… suck it
secure outdoor containment stable at Site-007
personally I would put a comma after "outdoor"
allowed access to exercise and must be monitored during its scheduled exercise during the time it's out of its stable.
"allowed to access to designated areas for exercise and is to be monitored at all times when out of its stable."
long-distance sniper
long-ranged sniper rifles is advised. I would exclude this part because normally snipers are already long-ranged. If you do remove this part maybe add the caliber instead?
A well placed sniper bullet to the skull should be enough to effectively neutralise RPC-545.
A bullet to the skull will effectively neutralize or incapacitate RPC-545.
Update: Due to recent events, the Containment Division has begun training RPC-545 to be used by ASF Personnel as a tool for guarding high-risk anomalies.
I like this idea
male domesticated Equus ferus caballus
male, domesticated Equus ferus caballus
"date"
fix the date to 1/24/2021 because months go before the day silly goose.
it still requires food, water and sleep in order to survive
it still requires basic necessities in order to survive
extra-dimensional space within its own body
add the extra-dimensional hazard
canons
fix all of the "canons" to "cannons"
4 m
4m
and the direction that they faced
and their orientation
summon
manifest
Hand Cannon
it has hands? or does someone control it?
the death of its previous owner
from the death of its previous owner
the Chapmen
the Chapmens or Mrs. Chapmen
Overall I found this entertaining to read! You should continue to describe how it can use extra-dimensional abilities! I would rate this a 3.5/5! Keep up the good work :D
Where there is a choice of two evils, I choose both.
To start, changing the site's theme is always nice.
The containment protocols are quick and simple, and immediately makes me wonder what species it is, what kind of animal it is, and why they're so willing to kill it.
although RPC-545 has been in Authority containment since 1883,
I always like historical anomalies so nice addition
RPC-545 can manipulate and change matter at a extra-dimensional level by manifesting canon-like structures throughout it's body, these structures are designated RPC-545-A, multiple RPC-545-A structures can manifest and appearances of the RPC-545-A structures vary and the appearances of the RPC-545-A would have different properties. Although RPC-545 doesn't receive any recoil of any kind when firing one or more RPC-545-A structure, RPC-545 has been reported to become more exhausted the longer and the more it utilizes the RPC-545-A structures.
"RPC-545 can manipulate and change matter at an extra-dimensional level via the manifestation of cannon-like structures throughout it's body. These structures are designated as RPC-545-A. Multiple RPC-545-A instances can manifest at the same time with varying appearances and anomalous properties. Although RPC-545 is not affected by recoil when firing one or more RPC-545-A, it has been reported to grow exhausted the longer and more heavily it utilizes RPC-545-A."
To a limited extent, RPC-545 is also capable of creating cannons anywhere in a 4 m radius, and can manipulate their structure and their orientation. RPC-545 has been recorded to manifest a variety of cannon types including
"To a limited extent, RPC-545 is also capable of creating cannons anywhere within a 4 m radius, and can manipulate their structure and orientation. RPC-545 has been recorded manifesting a variety of cannon types including the following:"
Because of its anomalous properties and physique, RPC-545 will often utilise its anomalous properties to protect itself or its companion(s) should they be endangered in some way. RPC-545 is temperamentally docile to personnel, but has demonstrated resistance against attempts by personnel to further domesticate RPC-545,"
"RPC-545 will often utilize its anomalous properties to protect itself or its companion(s) should they be endangered in some way. RPC-545 is temperamentally docile to personnel, but has demonstrated resistance to attempts by personnel to further domesticate it,"
RPC-545 was first discovered by Aliza Chapmen on the 3rd of June, 1883 in West Virginia after she was gifted RPC-545 for her work as an agent and weapon smith of the Steel Ring.
"RPC-545 was first discovered by Aliza Chapmen on the 3rd of June, 1883 in West Virginia after it was gifted to her for her work as an agent and weaponsmith at the Steel Ring."
The rest of the article is a bit too long for my brain but the letters of Chapmen feel a bit "artificial" if that even means anything. The RPC itself is pretty interesting and well done. If it could be condensed a bit I would give it a 5, but for now I'm gonna have to say 3/5. Sorry for making you wait on the crit my guy
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