Development of antimemetic shielding for RPC-379 and its surrounding crater are ongoing.
is ongoing
A long-term amnestic and gaslighting campaign will be necessary to eliminate the city of Puerto Pirámides from the public conscious.
the public consciousness
Constant strong winds, shifting between 80 and 140km/h and always coming from the southwest
Suggestion: shifting between 80 and 140km/h moving northeast
A faint sun-like light source is occassionally visible through the constant sandstorms
occasionally
Suggestion: A faint sun-like light source occasionally visible through the constant sandstorms
leaving a significant crater along the coast that has since filled with sea-water.
been filled
Reznor Reality Observation Engines
Suggestion: Crosslink to Dimesnsional Wanderers Syndrome
I also don’t know about using 116-years-old technology within such a hostile environment, those are considered as first-gen technology and should have been replaced with improved versions already.
RPC-379 is a one-way entry to ALTR-1313; all personnel and equipment entering it will remain inside indefinitely.
Suggestion: As RPC-379 is
a small team of incognito researchers are deployed
is deployed
approximately one hour after the beginning of anomalous activity
activities
SOUTHCOM Authority Central Intelligence block Puerto Pirámides internet connections.
blocks Puerto Pirámide’s
and an Anomaly Experimentation Team (AET) is sent to Puerto Pirámides.
Suggestion: “.and an additional… in tandem with ASF units” or something similar
CISNEROS: I— I'm not telling them that, but I got the message. [Slightly tilts his head.]
(Not exactly a recordable audio)
along a team from the Protocol Laboratory and an emergency deployment from the Engineering Component
along with
seawater that entered in contact with the anomaly
Entered into contact (?)
A Protectorate scout drone was requistioned from the area
requisitioned
a set of experimental signal amplificators
amplifiers
She takes interest on the drone
takes interest in
Drone operaries
“operators” or “operatory”
We don't know if even damn artillery would
a damn artillery
What we need is medical goods
are
intentionally-weakened parachute thethers
tethers
the first delivery attempt was carried out in June 4th
on June 4th
Not enjoying being in the other side, are we?
on the other side
But we uh..
…
There have not been mutual hostilies
hostilities
You are leaving me alone here, alone with them.
Suggestion: Change to plural nouns “us”, “we”
Water mist is not appropiate for constant wind
appropriate
this set is meant for indoors usage
indoor
Observed catching fire more often than normal for similar devices, possibly due to ALTR-1313's properties.
but it they've almost been discovered several times now.
it they’ve
But the big damn blob is very much there, god damnit.
Suggestion: Exclamation mark
certain panic in innermost segment of the Municipality
the innermost
Rangers and civilians occassionally peek on the windows
occasionally peek out the windows
If that miserable shit Cisneros doesn't feel like like sending backup
like like
The skull splits in four parts
into
The waning of the sandstorm allowed to perceive ALTR-1313 with unusual clarity
The waning of the sandstorm allowed ALTR-1313 to be perceived with unusual clarity
These structures appear to have intrincate designs carved onto them.
intricate
Numerous silhouettes of entities akin to that observed in the above incident log have been observed in the horizon.
on the horizon
occassionally swatting away at a fly
occasionally
and I didn't do neither jack or shit to aid 'em.
Eh
Suggestion: and I didn't do jack shit to aid 'em.
I hope you and everyone else keeps thinking like that five months in.
keep
On June 26th at 14:23, members of the newly-reinforced Protectorate guard on ALTR-1313
“in ALTR-1313” or even a more specific “in/at Puerto Pirámides”
Upon arriving to Puerto Pirámides
arriving at
Rangers on the perimeter of Puerto Pirámides have claimed to occassionally see humanoid silhouettes
occasionally
the Southwest perimeter of Puerto Pirámides
Don’t think you’ll have to capitalize that since you didn’t for a previous instance
Visual records of these entities is pending
are pending
Suggestion: Instead of making it plural use “Footage”
It is believed that they are the same silhouetters
silhouettes
Numerous reports of massive structures in the horizon of ALTR-1313 have been received.
at/on the horizon (?)
schoolbags and tupperware lay open throughout the hall
Tupperware products (?)
We should think a more straightforward way
think of a
apparenly grabbed by the leg,
apparently
The fire position is swiftly dissassembled with their assistance
disassembled
slowly limping with a rifle still in hus hand along a thousand-mile stare
his
along with
thus eliminating the need for a large-scale gaslighting campain.
campaign
I really have nothing but praise for this article (The hype is worth it). There's a few inconsistencies (or rather tiny bits of information that would have been great with some explanation) but overall it smooths out the narrative, which made it a blast to read.
Now post it. m'kay? ;)