The formatting on this one leaves a bit to be desired. The use of tabviews is clunky and unnecessary, and for some reason the Church of Malthus is linked the second time that they're mentioned in the article. Also, why are random numbers put in parentheses? Are they a secret code that I need to get the true ending or something?
The tone is also weak at times, though it could be much worse. The clunkiest part of the article to me is when it leads into a bulleted list with "with some noticeably larger ones being on the".
I also felt like it took a while to get to the point. Most parts seem to go on for at least a little longer than they need to, making the important parts harder to discern. The base effect is mostly uninteresting, which may sound strange, but this kind of body horror is really a dime a dozen to me. The first three addendums, while not entirely pointless, felt like white noise. I think they could be shortened greatly to improve the article.
When I got past all that, though, I thought this was actually a really decent article. The dialogue is engaging, and the story is gripping once it gets going. I've been reading all the Malthus articles, and this is one of the few that has really made good use of the group. There's a great story here, but the bad parts haven't been fully chiseled away in its current state. When I was finished, I got enough of the idea to enjoy it, though maybe not at its full potential. 4/5
