RPC-326 / Discussion

This is the discussion related to the wiki page RPC-326.

scott_hunts 04 Aug 2020 23:05

Thanks for the crit everyone! I made this and after a long break decided to get back to it. In the end I decided to tone down the excitement factor for a little bit of world building. Hope you enjoy reading it, let me know if you have any suggestions, or if I have anything I need to fix.

http://www.rpc-wiki.net/forum/t-13003118/the-pencil Early Crit

http://rpcsandbox.wikidot.com/forum/t-13615140/scott-hunts1 Later Crit

Also thanks to Mr. Gallup and others for crit on Discord!

H F Dummie 07 Aug 2020 03:20

Avoid getting crit on your sandbox page in the future, k thx bye

scott_hunts 11 Aug 2020 04:20

will do

Commander Vil Kleist 09 Aug 2020 23:51

Unlimited soap factory

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High Gamma 12 Oct 2022 06:24

Quirky, small read about a weird pen that does weird things. I quite like reading about the Authority when it's not dealing with ''World-Ending threat number 76'', or ''Huge Monster number Welostcountalready''. Very interesting use of an Alpha-class object as well, using it to train Authority personnel into ''the norm''.

It's a little boring tho, nothing really happens. That incident log is a bit redundant and could have easily been shortened down to a single div in a single paragraph. No need for detailing what we can already know from the get-go.

Yeah, it could use ''something else''. Maybe a log of ''forbidden materials''? Or even an unidentified liquid that can cure your wounds? Go wild! 3 stars, it could use something else…