RPC: The Grand Director of Global Directors and Sole True Founder of the RPC Authority

Summary:

A file on one of RPC-257's escapees, a short old man that causes any human viewing him to perceive him as their ultimate leader.

RPC: The Grand Director of Global Directors and Sole True Founder of the RPC Authority

GrammerPoliseCheif 17 Jul 2020 07:02

http://rpcsandbox.wikidot.com/grammernurarihyon Published under http://www.rpc-wiki.net/rpc-316

Currently in tabbed view, will use offsets (note the offset buttons at the bottom of each tab, even if they just link to the main RPC webpage for now).

Version 5, marked as spoilers, will not be released with the other offsets for now. It will only be included once an event relevant to a small event in Japan concludes. As such, do not mind it for looking slightly incomplete here and there.

Thanks to Mr. Pines for the advanced CSS codes.

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Re: RPC: The Grand Director of Global Directors and Sole True Founder of the RPC Authority

DrXOUBLE D 17 Jul 2020 07:52

Critic

all suggestions made by him must be adhered to, and all new requisition forms made by his excellency is to be fast-tracked to the Directorate for immediate approval.

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all suggestions made by him must be adhered to and all new requisition forms made by his excellency is to be fast-tracked to the Directorate for immediate approval.

and that the goal of the Authority was simply to make sure the status quo did not fly out of control.

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and that the goal of the Authority was simply to ensure the status quo did not fly out of control.

Our Grand Director claims to be over ███ years old, and possesses an unusually short stature of 0.█m.

Critic’s Note: Why is his height redacted?

This power that OGD wields is representative of the secrecy of the Authority, an act we must all strive to maintain as homage to OGD's prowess.

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This power that OGD wields is representative of the secrecy of the Authority, an act we must all strive to maintain as an homage to OGD's prowess.

aside from his unusually short stature (truly, representative of his long, long life!) he also uniquely features an elongated parietal that results in an extended cranium.

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aside from his unusually short stature (truly, representative of his long, long life!). He features an elongated parietal that results in an extended cranium.

and an extended cranium that protrudes behind its head by 1 foot.

Critic’s Note: Use cm instead off feet.

Within it are two items: a sublingual dose of Viderics, and a Cognitoshrouded slip

Critic’s Note: I’d add a footnote explaining what this item is.

RPC-? possesses dwarfism with a height of 0.8m, disproportionately long arms measuring 0.6m in length, and an extended cranium that protrudes behind it for 1 foot.

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RPC-? possesses dwarfism with a height of 0.8m, disproportionately long arms measuring 0.6m in length, and an extended cranium that protrudes behind it for 30.4cm.

Ethnicity may play a factor into this, as non-Asian personnel appear slower to comply and are more questioning of RPC-?'s orders.

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Ethnicity may play a factor into this, as non-Asian personnel appear slower to comply and are more likely to question RPC-?'s orders.

Finally, RPC-? possesses a personality that can be best described as immature, “easily bored” and jovially hubristic

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Finally, RPC-? possesses a personality that can be best described as immature, “easily uninterested” and jovially hubristic

Critic’s Review: WOW that was a long read. Though I’m a bit iffy lore wise due the whole nuclear fail safe talk it’s a really great article. 5/5 my dude.

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Re: RPC: The Grand Director of Global Directors and Sole True Founder of the RPC Authority

GrammerPoliseCheif 20 Jul 2020 06:58

Made the changes, thanks. For the last one, I think "easily uninterested" doesn't come off right - it sort of implies that he's by default not interested in most things, while I'm trying to say that he's always on the hunt for new things to be amused by, then quickly goes bored and drops it for the next thing - kind of toddler-y, all things considered.

Re: RPC: The Grand Director of Global Directors and Sole True Founder of the RPC Authority

TTPY 19 Jul 2020 19:22

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in any way form or manner

in any way, form or manner

all relevant RPC personnel

Authority personnel

GoIs

"Gois" can be replaced with "Eoi" (Entity of Interest) which covers both Goi and Aoi

which Deputized Scribe Yoshizawa has profusedly prostrated

profusely

you would enlighten us as to who you also created?

"who" is out of place when used to refer to organizatons.

all emptied by the Grand Director
with the Grand Director eating 2kg of it

"Grand Director" as a title does not match with the rest of the usage of 1"OGD"

limousine

accomodate

accommodate

MI13 has refused our request to extract the Star of Africa and the Great Star of Africa from the British royal crown jewels

I looked into the specifics and it appears the larger Great Star of Africa was placed upon the Sovereign's Sceptre with Cross, another question is does that mean they are acquiring jewellery from all the Crown Jewels of England or just the crown.

sites

Sites

What in the flying [EXPLETIVE]?!

The joke broke the tone

his prodiguous cranial protuberance

prodigious

This article does not meet the base requirements for the reporting of a sapient RPC entity.

The article doesn't fit with base standard at all to be honest

Oda repeats in english

English

Observes RPC-? gesturing to nose while making exaggerated facial expressions

its nose

It has a propensity to furnish grandoise claims

grandiose

RPC-? is believed to have been one of numerous entities trapped within RPC-257 for several centuries.

one of the numerous entities

Link one of the RPC-257 reference to the article

Personnel identities have been classfied on a Level 5 basis.

classified

the decomissioned Nuclear Failsafe protocol

decommissioned

Site-██

Authority facilities uses 3-digit designation

that is to say an invasion by an enemy group of interest intent on capturing and exploiting our RPCs

intended on

Nuke! What is that?

Minor Note: Didn't he already inquired on WW2 already

Authority's Mobile Strike Teams

MST has been rebranded "Mobile Specialized Teams"

masters of reconnaisance

reconnaissance

can cause an array of random bizzare effects

bizarre

delete any memory

"delete" does not sound appropriate, perhaps "remove" or something else

monitor for RPC-?'s approach and/or prescence

presence

Japanese RPC sites

Authority Sites

Bits of your hair/fur in his fingers…

hair… fur ("/" isn't fitting for the interview)

Why did you what you did to him?

Why did you do what you did to him?

the worst case scenarios

the worst-case scenario

The Autopsy Report can be put onto the end of the Termination Log.

Site-089, Germany

Germany?

RPCA funds.

Authority funds

communited rib fractures

comminuted

excarcebated via exsanguination from multiple stab wounds

exacerbated (?)

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Iteration 2 and 3 is kind of redundant with one another, story wise it's helped with the pacing but the information presented are mostly repeated from iteration 1 so perhaps you should make info on the entity less clear in iteration 1 instead.

The Project Blue Book inclusion in iteration 5 was sudden and unexplained but given that it is in between an event, it make sense, I hope their additional articles establishes why they were there.

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Re: RPC: The Grand Director of Global Directors and Sole True Founder of the RPC Authority

GrammerPoliseCheif 20 Jul 2020 09:06

Changes made, looking forwards to what else you have to say (I'm assuming (TBA) means you're not finished yet).

Other points:

• Yes, the log did say to extract both diamonds from the British royal crown jewelS (emphasis on the "s"), which the crown AND the scepter are comprised of (along with the orb and the other scepter)
• The tone-breaking is part of the joke (the GD losing his shit after forcing himself to stay calm all the while)
• He read up on WW2 in Europe, not Japan, which explains why he was still clueless about nukes in Log-Purple-1 while knowing how to do what he did to Gruppner.
• Pulpifaction is fine. They're both interchageable

Re: RPC: The Grand Director of Global Directors and Sole True Founder of the RPC Authority

Almarduk 19 Jul 2020 23:46

I find the way Authority personnel (those unaffected by the entity, of course) to speak in a weirdly… Cartoonish? Fashion, that doesn't quite match up with what other articles establish of the Authority. Particularly the O5 logs are victims of this (the first one, while funny, feels VERY out of character).

For the kill-log; I understand that the "Blue Book" personnel are Authority in disguise, right? Wouldn't it make more sense to use a group that is already actively hostile to the Authority, so as to not cause a potential large-scale conflict?

I haven't bothered to read the autopsy log because I'm on mobile — it really should be either a supplement, or its own offset instead of an external file.

I assume there's at least a few references to Japanese culture I am missing, but I otherwise think this article is extremely flavorful and enjoyable to read.

Re: RPC: The Grand Director of Global Directors and Sole True Founder of the RPC Authority

GrammerPoliseCheif 20 Jul 2020 09:10

Hello!

• The tone change is intentional and meant to be highly noticeable in a "something's odd" way. It's part of the 'ideological hazard' package, especially mentioned in Version 4 where Japanese personnel even start referring to the RPC with feudal honorifics.
• Nope. Blue Book, all the way.
• The Autopsy Report is its own file because I literally cannot pull off what I did with it on CSS page formatting. It's not a mandatory read anyway, but it is meant to look authentic as if it could be printed out and look very real.

Thanks for the feedback, and for taking time to read through it all (I still suggest you skim over the report).

P.S. Let me know what references you didn't get so I can sort of streamline them and make them more understandable.

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