RPC-448 / Discussion

This is the discussion related to the wiki page RPC-448.

the sprongle tower

Almarduk 09 Jul 2020 20:15

WOOOHH

FINALLY, Cair Aisling Submission 1/3.

Related to RPC-370. You should read it, it's much better than this.

There's no further blurb here. Everything is self-explanatory.

Thanks to Baubius, Dummie, Tarbolin, RealAmerican, TTPY, Fifth and Vizlox. Even if I didn't fully apply your crits, they helped me make my article better. Thank you!

EDIT: Because I forgot to put it here — the name "Eidolon Wyrm" is taken from here.

To be noted, the name originated as a replacement for "Ghost Leviathan", with "Eidolon" being a direct synonym to ghost or phantom. The NPC in question originally ripped off many conceptual aspects, artistic design, and obviously name from Subnautica's own Ghost Leviathans.

The entity mentioned in this article is not the same as in the mod.

Last edited on 12 Jul 2020 18:22 by Almarduk Show more

moist bread 09 Jul 2020 23:50

eidolon wyrm do be like that

0ktober 13 Jul 2020 12:26

I stand by my feedback that the notice at the top and subsequent missing containment protocols is very jarring. The fact you didn’t change that is surprising to me.

(or an, depending on the source)

This can be removed. The word “the” can refer to a single entity, or a species of entities, the latter being redundant with this parentheses statement.

I feel like a lot of the first half of this article is drawn out and too repetitive, repeating the same statements about the Authority not knowing anything about the tower—I understand the gimmick, you can stop shoving it in my face now.

I’m halfway between 3 star and 4 starring this. I feel like it took too long to pick up but it started to get interesting around the samples. I wouldn’t call it super captivating though. I’m going to 3 star this. I will change it to a 4 star if you get rid of the notice or otherwise make that beginning less jarring.

Edit: page has been updated and I’ve changed my vote to a 4.

Last edited on 13 Jul 2020 18:36 by 0ktober Show more

Croal 03 Aug 2020 16:39

All known races in the island actively evade passage near RPC-448 for unknown reasons, refusing to elaborate further.

Dwarven travelers commonly know of it, and many have visited it with the purpose of sightseeing.

Huh?

0ktober 03 Aug 2020 17:27

more proof that nihil makes no sense…….

Almarduk 08 Aug 2020 23:42

shit fuck

fixed