RPC-606 / Discussion

This is the discussion related to the wiki page RPC-606.

ImNotEric 31 May 2020 06:41

This is an entry made between me (ImNotEric) and a friend (Excer) for the TRH CONTEST and its also my first article on the site (we did not win obvs). The mandatory tags were Explosive, Immeasurable, and Teleportation. We did not choose a random image. It is inspired by the pseudo-scientific speculatory biology theory "The sky is alive". Which in itself claims that UFOs are not vehicles, but giant living creatures. plz crit and upvote

crit:
http://rpcauthority.wikidot.com/forum/t-13342286/contest:trhcontestexcer-imnoteric
http://www.rpc-wiki.net/forum/t-13311315

excer's author page: http://www.rpc-wiki.net/excer
The other work I wrote for the site (very proud of this one, it got kinda raided but its ok): http://rpcauthority.wikidot.com/working-unpaid-overtime

Last edited on 31 May 2020 07:14 by ImNotEric Show more

Malfestance 27 Jun 2020 04:02

+ Grammar/spelling crit

At the time of writing, an SSAEE is theorized as a time of estrus for the species, occurring every four (4) years (yr) and taking no more than a few hours (hr) at a time. During this period, a single (1) female, hereby designated RPC-606-Ω, would inexplicably materialize itself, followed by a group of three (3) to five (5) males. The aforementioned are then labeled from RPC-606-Β-1 to RPC-606-Β-5.

This parenthesizing 100% disrupts the flow of the article, throughout. It serves no purpose to put arithmetical translations of the same concept, as if the reader wouldn't be able to figure out otherwise. In this instance, replace them all with the numerical ones.

All of its limbs and other bodyparts body parts originate from its central axis. Its conjured this This radial volumetric symmetry enables response to stimuli from all directions.

The comprehensive observation of the RPC-606 breeding process is an evolving operation,

The GIF

While I do love me a glitch effect, there's really nothing from what I can see that explains why the hell it's happening. Are all Authority cameras shit or something? I also would like to mention that it distracts from reading, my eyes keep instinctively thinking about the moving object in my vision and I lose focus. I swear I'm not autistic, right guys?

… Right?

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I like the idea, and the execution is well done, too. However, the rampant parenthesizing "One (1) nasty-ass motherfucker" completely disrupts the flow of the article and, frankly, ruins the experience.

Until it's fixed, I hold my rating at 2 stars. Don't make me do this, pls.

Edit: Haha, nice. 4 stars.

Last edited on 27 Jun 2020 05:21 by Malfestance Show more