http://rpcsandbox.wikidot.com/main-operationalwolf
Note: This draft was originally for a 001 draft, but was converted for the contest.
- Dr. Pierson
"Curiosity Always Defines Reasoning"
This wont be organized at all
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When analyzed for ACS levels, the results for RPC-001's levels were determined to be [REDACTED]
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A redacted already? That was early, It would be interesting to see you diving into this but ok whatever.
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With results inconclusive, it was concluded that the space may be infinite.
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Sounds kinda non-clinical but I don't know nothing of that shit would recommend
"With results inconclusive, it was concluded that the space of RPC-XXX is close to infinite."
RPC-001-1 is a sentient humanoid that appears to be the pocket dimension's only inhabitant.
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The classic mysterious man in every mysterious article, lets see where this leads.
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While RPC-001-1 is usually docile, subjects who are deemed a threat to or perceived to be a threat to RPC-001 will be forcefully by RPC-001-1.
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also have been deemed a threat
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suggesting that the flame only manifests on materials brought from the pocket dimension.
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Kinda redundant with last sentence but nothing actually wrong with it
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Researcher Kelsey Fisher, and RPC-001-1 have allowed the entry of Authority personnel into RPC-001
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This make almost no sense… Who has allowed them? RPC-001? Can he do that? does he think? And if not please specify RPC-001-1 is allowed and also allowed Fisher
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discovered a dimensional gateway, designated as RPC-001, during the construction of a new site facility at [REDACTED], Sweden.
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Never explained or elaborated, just dropped and left here? Idk you could have done a lot more.
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Name: [REDACTED]
Active: 323 B.C - ???
Status: Deceased
Bio-Summary: [DATA EXPUNGED]
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Great, I love those… Also, the only place outside of Europe you got was Egypt and Pakistan… even though the Pakistani was white, quite eurocentric eh?
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Dr. Baker: Yes, indeed. [Opens folder] Now, again, you're not obligated to be here as my colleagues have stated-
Dr. Baker: If you say so. [Looks at the folder] What can you tell me about RPC-001?
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Those (actions) are usually made in
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Like, when did it first manifest?
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Would use "For example"
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RPC-001-1: Not quite. I like to think its a reference to Alexander the Great.
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Ok… Not the most Librarian creature out there.
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"Nothing much. I'm a former teacher and knowledgeable in a lot of languages."
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Though he was born in the dimension?
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RPC-001-1: [In German] I can speak German.
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HAAAAAHAHAAHAHXSCGUSDJ
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Dr. Baker: Ah, Deutsch.4 Anything else?
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BE CON SIS TENT. If you will say "in german" in one, continue in the other, or do both in german.
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Dr. Wilkinson: Well, our theory was that he was having a bad day.
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Oh my god, I cant with those fucking "w-well maybe he was having a bad day;" get a better explanation. PLEASE.
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RPC-001-1: [Pauses, thinks] I see. I feel we must renegotiate our agreement, Mr. Wilkinson.
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Ok so RPC-001-1 is not only perfect, but he is also a whiny child that never got punched?
Nice, giving him depth.
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Besides, the ending had me going, quite interesting how you left it in mid-air what it was for the reader, MAYBE too much mystery but we don't know as we never get a clear image of what the fuck that is.
Not a bad article, just conceptually weak, We have a ton of knowledge-based, pocket dimensional, guarded by anomalies… anomalies.
It would be great to have a bigger twist than brain tumor though.
I have my orders as much as you. You are to draft a false memorandum in regards to RPC-001, stating that there was an incident that resulted in the immediate inactivity of the anomaly. Details of such are to not be provided for "security reasons." Only a few know the current status of RPC-001, and we are to keep it that way for the future.
Contact me as usual if you have any questions.
This was interesting, maybe the entire anomaly we read was a makeup for something else, but even then, what that something else could be, were there hints for it? Confusing but, overall, a great article, 3.5/5 or 4/5
Containment Protocols
related-source
no hyphen here
removing materials from RPC-001 without authorization, or act on misappropriate behavior,
"removing materials from RPC-001 without authorization, or acting inappropriately,"
and given a disciplinary action
"and disciplined"
RPC-001 is to not be entered
"RPC-001 is not to be entered"
will result in amnesticise
"will result in amnesticization"
Description
the Strahov Monastery at Prague, Czech Republic.
replace "at" with "in"
the spacetime is perceived to be affected by a time distortion, meaning that time moves at an extremely slow pace. Various observations conducted revealed that a minute passing by is the equivalent to 12 hours outside of the dimension.
wouldn't this mean that time moves faster instead of slower
It is encompassed by long hallways and large wooden shelves, measured to be at 8 meters tall,
this is repeated twice, choose somewhere to put it and use it only once
While the location is similar to the Strahov Monastery, source materials located at RPC-001 appear to contain various lost materials. Some of these materials include ancient Chinese texts, Biblical text, the Gospel of Eve, and many more. It's speculated that RPC-001 houses thousands of lost materials since 285 B.C, the oldest date
this entire paragraph is a repetition of one or two sentences in the previous paragraph
subjects who are deemed a threat to or perceived to be a threat to RPC-001 will be forcefully by RPC-001-1.
forcefully what?
the materials burnt and disintegrated reemerged within RPC-001.
"reemerge"
Addendums
I'm confused with how early these dates are for RPC-001-1 instances
later on the current 001-1 speaks German, but I don't know if that language is that old
why are these interview logs so tiny??
through sentences, which they appear
"through sentences, which appear"
I like to think its a reference
"it's"
Well, let's just say a lot since I'll be taking most of your time if I name them all.
"Well, let's just say many of them, since I'll be taking up most of your time if I name them all."
I actually wanna discuss over about your encounter with RPC-001
"I actually want to discuss your first encounter with RPC-001"
Apology or not- one of your people have acted upon grossly within sacred grounds.
"Apology or not, one of your people has acted in a gross manner upon sacred ground."
I was going to inquire you about that.
"ask" instead of "inquire"
I was afraid you're going to say that, but are you sure you wanna renegotiate?
"I was afraid you were going to say that, but are you sure you want to renegotiate?"
An incident that isn't impossible to be repeated in the future.
"An incident that very well may be repeated in the future."
I am but disappointed.
remove "but"
Personnel assignment and visitations
"assignments"
Overall
interesting read, I can see bits of what would've been the RPC-001 submission sprinkled throughout
gonna add that after reading I don't get how the title relates to the article
Personnel who are caught removing materials from RPC-001 without authorization, or act on misappropriate behavior, are to be reported and given a disciplinary action accordingly.
Misappropriate behaviour sounds odd here. Act in unscrupulous manners? Given disciplinary action? Remove the "a".
"Furthermore, RPC-001 is to not be entered unless granted by either RPC-001 or RPC-001-1."
Unless clearance/permission is explicitly granted
Description: RPC-001 is a spatial anomaly that takes the form of a library, speculated to be an aperture to a pocket dimension.
"Aperture" means opening, so it sort of contextually doesn't rub right. First you describe the interior, then you say it takes the form of a doorway to a pocket dimension? The way it sounds is like "the library is an aperture to a pocket dimension" so it sort of needs a little rewording.
"It's unspecified why materials get moved around on a daily basis,"
This context is sort of loosely wobbling about on its own weak foundation. What do you mean by moved around, are the books being actively reshuffled all over the library? Pulled out and levitated all over? You should say the library actively and anomalously recategorizes itself, using an unknown telekinetic force directed by an unknown mind to shuffle and rearrange books all over.
"At <time>, RPC-? undergoes a <insert whatever name> event where its extensive contents would be manipulated by a telekinetic force of unknown source. During this event, said contents will be removed from shelves, transferred across the facility and re-categorized and sorted in different shelves. The purpose of this event is unknown."
Current measurements appear to exceed over the limited space,
exceed the limited dimensions of the host location
the space may be infinite.
may possess no limitations (I think)
subjects who are deemed a threat to or perceived to be a threat to RPC-001 will be forcefully by RPC-001-1.
Forcefully what?
the materials burnt and disintegrated reemerged within RPC-001.
the destroyed materials remanifest fully intact within RPC-001.
Shouldn't 001-01 be sapient, not sentient?
Active: 19 A.D - Present
Did you mean 2019-AD? Since this particular 001-01 started off as a nuclear physicist, which is not exactly a common job in 0019AD.
The ending seems a bit abrupt open-and-shut, in a "RPC's neutralized, nothing to see here, move on" forced kind of way. A cover story is required.
I'll be honest Piers, it feels a bit like a lite version of the Serpent's Hand's wandering library.
Failure to abide by this procedure will result in amnesticise and temporary transfer.
amnestication
It is encompassed by long hallways and large wooden shelves, measured to be at 8 meters tall
(This line is repeated in the second and third paragraph)
subjects who are deemed a threat to or perceived to be a threat to RPC-001 will be forcefully by RPC-001-1.
(you're missing a word here which I assumed to be "removed")
In July 9, 1958
On
Various field analysis were conducted over the weeks
analyses for plural
RPC-001 and RPC-001-1 was designated soon afterwards.
were
PC-001-1 provided a history document
historical
Log of RPC-001-1 instances
(Kind of inconsistent with how large the gap in duration for each instacnes is, the time period should have been more spread out, and should have been revealed in a less obivious way through implication of previous -1 instances)
cause of death was brain hemorrhage.
a brain hemorrhage.
Is that who you refer to personally, or that is their given nickname?
Is that whom you refer to personally, or is that their given nickname?
I actually wanna discuss over about your encounter with RPC-001 and your initial manifestation as a keeper-
I actually wanna discuss about your encounter with RPC-001 and your initial manifestation as a keeper-
I am bit disappointed.
I am disappointed.
The Directorate are willing to renegotiate with RPC-001-1, but what happens is probably less people visiting RPC-001.
The Directorate is willing to renegotiate with RPC-001-1, but what happens is probably that fewer people will be allowed to visit RPC-001.
Details of such is to not be provided
Details of such are to not be provided
The article seems to be missing an addendum or two to give context to why the Directorate wants people to think the anomaly is neutralized.
Also, this is probably not intentional but...
