A Storm Is Brewin' / Discussion

This is the discussion related to the wiki page A Storm Is Brewin'.

Croal 20 May 2020 15:03

This user was assigned Sapient, Climatological and Tychokinetic.

(account deleted) 25 May 2020 23:10

I'm finding proofreading issues here. I cannot upvote a contest entry that still has grammar issues.

0ktober 25 May 2020 23:10

I feel that each individual part of the article was really solid and fantastic, but the article couldn’t decide what it wanted to be. It started as a standard article then turned into a comedy and then horror(?) at the end. Still good enough to +1. I would give this four stars if it were a mainlist in its current state.

Almarduk 27 May 2020 01:25

It's very competently written, but doesn't seem to do much with what it has. The anomalies themselves are nothing of particular note, dipping the article into the realm of genericness. Further exploration of the parallel dimension at work here could really make this article work, but it currently just doesn't for me.

H F Dummie 29 May 2020 03:29

It's a decent idea, but not adequately explored to be good enough at the moment.

+1 for now. I'll probably 3 it afterwards.

(account deleted) 29 May 2020 08:20

Overall, I'm pleased with the individual elements in the piece, but they don't mesh well together. The expansion I recommended you make was not attempted, and I'm just left wanting to know more, but not in a good way. There's just not enough there. The tonal shifts between both addendums are very jarring, one seemingly comedically driven, the other a horror. It just doesn't read well, and makes me feel conflicted during reading. 3 stars in present state, but I'm downvoting for the aforementioned issues.

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