RPC-355 / Discussion

This is the discussion related to the wiki page RPC-355.

Notice of Re-upload

Alex Mercer Fan Club 10 Apr 2020 00:57

This article has been re/upload it from the original author (me).
all the new formatting and grammar errors have been implemented.

Prototype_Toaster 30 Oct 2020 13:41

The images are somewhat interesting but this article is an absolute slog to read. If this is supposed to make me care for a GOI then it is failing miserably. 2/5

Almarduk 13 Jan 2021 19:36

Relatively interesting concept, explored in a rather one-dimensional direction. As I see it, the article attempts three things;

• Exploration of a pseudoscientific concept
• Exploration of the spiritual aspect of vegetal life/naturalism/"being one with the trees"
• Introduction of a GoI and its motives

And as I see it, it fails for the following reasons;

• The pseudoscientific part of the article is barely explained, particularly the natural incompatibility between vegetal and animal organisms that are supposedly being merged. The specifics of the process would be interesting to read, but such specifics are absent.
• The spiritual aspect is entirely detached from the prior one. While I guess the part about "being happier" as trees could be explained as sunlight exposure prompting production of dopamine, the Alpha and Omega (haha, I get it) events come off as rather forced and non-clinical in their description. The switch between a pseudoscientific explanation and this strangely spiritual and feels-y section creates significant whiplash¹ and I think it's just forced when written this way.
• The SoY are introduced as a generic GoI link to an article that did not need it. The same role could have been easily filled by a single Person of Interest or a one-off GoI (which could have worked as a gateway for the spiritual aspect of the article), which leaves a rather insipid taste when looking at the involvement of the SoY.

For these reasons, I'll give this article a +1. I believe that it has significant potential and would gladly help rework if it falls beneath deletion range.

Footnotes

1. This whiplash is present in just about every article, but there are ways to diminish it or exploit it. While probably every article has things that happen "because they do", as in, because anomalies, this is often diminished by having thematic consistency or indirect allusion to a process/event that is developing outside of the eyes of the Authority.

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Almarduk 06 Apr 2021 17:12

Sources for the files I've localized:

• 355-1
• 355-2
• 355-3
• 355-4
• 355-5

5150wned 31 Aug 2021 20:42

1/5 overall.

2/5 premise. It makes you into good trees.
1/5 delivery. Among many other things, insects are attracted to nectar, not pollen. Many. Other. Things.
2/5 grammar. Takes brute force of mind to slog through the paragraphs.

Big Mark 15 Jan 2022 07:32

Well, it’s not too bad for being literally just Tree Virus. Sons of Yggdrasil feels shoehorned because “tree lol” and of course only appears as a mention off the side in the addendum. As for the tone I think it needs better proof-reading cause me and others confirmed it’s a bit of a slog, and I also saw some grammatical mistakes here and there that just reading it over again can fix easily.

It’s not a terrible article but it falls flat for being generic and sluggish. 3/5

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Oak_Seeker 06 Mar 2023 20:05

The article has a pleasant concept, and made me hate the authority for once, but it feels like wasted potential. There could of been a better explained behavior for the instances, and a potential for conflict involving the GOI, honey locusts grow thorns for a reason.
That said I'm going to drink some birch water now.