RPC-986 / Discussion

This is the discussion related to the wiki page RPC-986.

0ktober 23 Jan 2020 20:54

There are a lot of tonal issues throughout the whole thing, and the story felt disjointed. The Amazing Co thing wasn’t explained at the start so it just felt tacked on. There was no reason to have this an Amazing Co RPC.

The test log was just completely random because the result never had anything to do with the sentence written down. Because of that, it didn’t add to the whole of the article at all. There wasn’t anything to learn about the RPC in that log that wasn't already stated in the description. It’s missed potential.

The domino theory thing is superficial and unscientific. It is a pretty poor conclusion to the article.

Last edited on 23 Jan 2020 20:54 by 0ktober Show more

Yoknapatawpha 24 Jan 2020 22:48

Repeating Viz' sentiments exactly.

Further adding

The thing is that even tho the appearance of the person changes the reason which would make them change never existed yet they still did change.

"tho" should be a really obvious spelling mistake critters and the author should've picked up on upon rereads.

Croal 27 Jan 2020 19:37

There's a lot of grammatical errors and awkward wording in this article that need to be improved.

Orkaborg 29 Jan 2020 20:14

I believe that I fixed it.

Prototype_Toaster 27 Jan 2020 23:07

When I did my critique of this a while back I remember my biggest issue was it had no real sense of direction and wasted a really good idea. I feel as if this still doesn't go anywhere truly interesting and is just sorta lame. However I don't agree with the massive ammount of people 1 starring this like it's the worst thing ever. As I said, good idea I just hate how this was executed so poorly. If you were to workshop this some more and give it a proper direction, I feel that I and many others would give this a better score.

Nani12 04 Feb 2020 19:07

I enjoyed the read, the idea is interesting, it is kinda you write it happens but I like how chaotic it is. I gave it 4 stars.

Almarduk 06 Apr 2021 18:56

Source for the file I've localized:

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