First notice, there is no mention of where this bunker is located?
a 10-meter tall perimeter fence has been erected in a 50-meter radius around RPC-241-2, with a sentry tower on each corner (the sentry towers are to be manned by at least two individuals at all times), as well as at least two other security personnel who are to patrol the perimeter.
A prison has been built around this bunker where at least ten personnel must be around at all times, where entities sometimes come out, and this somehow has an Alpha classification?
Any entities observed leaving RPC-241-2 are to be detained immediately. They will be subject to interrogation and, if possible, given Class-A amnesiacs and integrated into society. If for whatever reason this is not possible, they are to be terminated.
Amnestics, not amnesiacs. Also, why would the Authority just wipe their memories and release them into society when they are literally the key to figuring out the anomaly.
being able to dodge gunfire from an M4 assault rifle at a distance of 10 meters.
10 meters feels arbitrary, why not just try it at the closest possible distance? Also, this implies that the Authority tried to neutralize RPC-241-1 which isn't mentioned anywhere.
Lieutenant ████████: Tell me, do you know what is behind those doors?
RPC-241-1: No sir.
He opens the door every time he kills somebody to throw them in, but doesn't know what is inside?
Yeah, I think this needed more time in the oven. This one just didn't really go anywhere. There is definitely a lot of potential here that could lead to greatness, but I just wasn't feeling it man. At the moment, the best thing the article is pointing towards is the idea that there is an alternate reality version of the Soviet Union, which I think could easily lead to something super cool if it was expanded upon.
Not terrible, but not good either. 2 stars.
