RPC-214 / Discussion

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Cloverchan 05 Sep 2019 08:43

I liked it! The idea seemed pretty interesting and original. Only complain would be the random, unnecessary commas that sometimes you place. Some of them where just wrong like:

Should research personnel become a designated instance, of RPC-214-A, they must confront RPC-214

The "of RPC-214-A" shouldn't be in beetwin commas, as it shows unskipable information, removing the first comma should fix it tho, so no worries there.

Either way, solid 4 stars in my opinion.

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Dattop 01 Nov 2019 02:14

Neat idea, the writing for the article itself was average but made up for by the writing of 214 itself speaking, that made up for it and is seemingly your stronger suit (as is mine as you could probably tell by 268…)

Writing 4/5
Grammar: Not the best judge of grammar but I'd say it was fine?
Premise: 4/5, not mindblowing but still interesting.

Overall: 4/5. Is worth expanding upon (such as a tale or maybe more test logs. But isnt exactly 001 worthy or 5 star worthy)

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H F Dummie 14 Jun 2020 10:45

The idea is decent and the execution passable but the formatting looks very 2008. I suggest referencing some other articles for the format. I suggest reading 722 or 242 for what I mean.

Big Mark 15 Jan 2022 02:51

The underlying metaphor for the acceptance of our internal desires and how we can’t escape them may be abysmal but fuck me if this isn’t well written. The dialogues in the logs feels a bit awkward or stiff but whatever 214 says is impeccable, that one twist at the end was very nice.

I’d say this is how you make a good article.

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onefullydone 30 Aug 2023 03:45

Not sure why the top has to tell me the canon is baseline when it is obviously baseline. Also what is the point of the test logs if they don't have anything in them (as I'm writing this.)

Overall a very gross premise with great logs that are engaging to read and give a sense of mystery. Reminds me that the minds of humans can be infested with well, not the best. 5 stars.