Float Like A Butterfly, Sting Like A Sword / Discussion

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Togetic 15 Jul 2019 07:38

Thanks to Coupon/Croal for the critique and Sinaticus for his grammar edits, even if i have no idea what he changed.

I sort of banged this out over three sleepless nights seperated by a number of weeks each, so i'm happy that it flows together decently. Kawaii Korps bug boy/Racist sword adventures are a thing i've been wanting to write for a while, failsafe seemed like the right event to make it happen in

JimmyJohnJohnson 18 Jul 2019 13:47

It’s good but I think u should link the rpcs in the story because I don’t know who exactly this story is about and what happened at the end? Like what’s with the warm ness and the light?

Togetic 18 Jul 2019 18:15

We ended up talking about this on the discord, but i found this to be pretty useful feedback. I made it clearer at the end that it was the nuclear detonation hit them, and created a supplimentary page that gives the anomalies a little more description

Adejny 31 Aug 2025 04:50

This tale was wonderful, I was extremely invested in 'Squires' entire arc, finding their own autonomy, I was hooked the entire time.

My only critique of note was a single typo made after they struck down the scientist.

'A sickening, wet crunch follows and you can’t parse the mess you’ve mad.'

I presume 'mad' should be 'made'.

Other than that, no other complaints from me, I loved it!