Well formatted piece, your signature GoI overdosing is done well in this context.
"At 0437 hours a nuclear detonation was observed within the state of Nevada within the United States of America." - I'd find another way to phrase this than use within twice in a row. Maybe "was observed in Nevada, within US territory." Or not even mention the US at all, as most people know where Nevada is.
"various members of the 'anomalous community'" - Maybe its just me but the term "anomalous community" already has a definition in my brain, maybe use a different term, or at the very least use 'organizations' instead of 'members'.
"Manual investigation of one of these non-responsive satellites revealed that various chaotic growths of wires and cables were littered across its surface." - There has to be a better way to signify that the satellites have joined the Array than literal wire-growths. It just seems like too much. AEGIS didn't infect the satellites with an anomalous virus or anything it just persuaded them to join it right? I don't know it seems like its kind of out of place.
That's all I got, I'm not on crit team.
But keep writing Array articles, they fuel me.
google_chrome, 02 Jul 2019 21:12