RPC-780 / Discussion

This is the discussion related to the wiki page RPC-780.

FeetpicsRus 24 Jun 2019 21:17

Hey dude, fix those RPC-XXXXs

SSplinterful 24 Jun 2019 22:01

Thanks. Its fixed now.

GrammerPoliseCheif 25 Jun 2019 05:08

Try Personnel are to patrol the site for signs of RPC-780-1.

What's a Try Personnel? Is it a contract group? Or did you mean "The personnel"? If so you didn't even have to include the first word, "Personnel" alone is fine.

Personnel are to be on the lookout for a dark hooded entity at the entrance of RPC-780.

Why is this dark-hooded entity mentioned here then never mentioned again? Should it be classified as RPC-780-1? Does it do anything other than stand at the entrance? Does it persuade people to go in/stay out depending on how close they are to natural death? Is it hostile? What should personnel do if they see it?

Having read all the way to the bottom I finally see an explanation, but since it apparently doesn't appear, I think it needs to be reworded to insert the italics: "for the possibility of a dark-hooded entity"

RPC-780 is a wooden bridge that appears around the times of 24:00 - 2:15 CST.

Okay, but where exactly does it appear? Taiwan only, right? Does it appear across empty ravines, or does it overlap upon an existing bridge?

appears to be made from type of wood called [REDACTED] mostly found in Africa.

1) "from a type of wood"
2) "mostly found in" is very casual english. Use "endemic to Africa".

[DATA EXPUNGED] m

Too wordy. Change it to black bars instead, so either ██m or ███m.

Matches burn out when stepping onto the bridge of RPC-780.

Matches only? What about torches? Oil lanterns? Electronic lights? Glow sticks? You need to expand this to cover every form of light source.

RPC-780 anomalous effects begin when staring at the entrance of RPC-780.

RPC-780's anomalous effects, you mean. This line can be merged with the next one.

appears in distress.

appears to be in distress, you mean.

The screaming continues until CSD personnel reaches 40 minutes of walking.

What happens after 40 minutes of walking, does it stop? Does it get louder? Does it start talking or pleading?

will locate them in ██████

Missing full stop.

manifested itself in front of personal

Personnel.

After this RPC-780 has appered

Appeared.

Last edited on 25 Jun 2019 05:18 by GrammerPoliseCheif Show more

JimmyBoyHaha 26 Jun 2019 05:16

God, this was not very good. Like, at all. There are loads of grammatical/tonal errors, and the article goes nowhere. It's a bridge that kills you. That's it. Nothing else. The excessive and unnecessary redaction does not help this. +1

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oh yeah yeah

SSplinterful 27 Jun 2019 02:27

I just noticed the load of grammatical errors. And Ive unredacted some words.