my only complaint is that this is barely a tale, seems more like an in-universe scientific paper
wouldnt it go in like, acquired media or some other category
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The intention was to make this an in-universe paper, but sadly there is no other category to put this under. So I had no choice but to put it in tales. Thought it would be fine since the incomplete history of the authority is also a tale.
Dreams. Each man longs to pursue his dream. Each man is tortured by this dream, but the dream gives meaning to his life. Even if the dream ruins his life, man cannot allow himself to leave it behind. In this world, is man ever able to possess anything more solid, than a dream?
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I can see myself integrating this into the RCPA universe well. Really well. Thanks for the resource!
Are you good?
Dreams. Each man longs to pursue his dream. Each man is tortured by this dream, but the dream gives meaning to his life. Even if the dream ruins his life, man cannot allow himself to leave it behind. In this world, is man ever able to possess anything more solid, than a dream?
~Kentaro Miura
(account deleted)has decreased, from 3.97 to 3.9799981
The numbers show that the ACS has increased and not decreased even though the text says it decreased.
It's a fine article, sure, but I have a couple of issues, mainly grammatical ones or minor mistakes.
"The Researchers requested to make these proposals…"
'Researchers' shouldn't be capitalized.
"Dr. Huehnergard goes in his theory goes to cite RPCs…"
'Goes' is used twice here, I think a better sentence would be, 'In his theory, Dr. Huehnergard cites RPCs…"
"With the invention of the Radio in 1894 and the mass commercialization of telephones happening in 1905, could it be seen as such a stretch to consider that we simply did not have the communications necessary to find as many anomalies we have now."
'Radio' doesn't need to be capitalized, but that could be a stylistic choice. However, the sentence should end with a question mark.
"While many in the Authority would agree on this notion, it's still criticized heavily due to the Donnellon's bias towards organization such as the Association for Ecclesiastical Primacy and GEAR, to which he alludes to multiple times in his theory."
Several flaws, so I'll just rewrite it: 'While many in the Authority would agree on this notion, it is still criticized heavily due to the Donnellon's bias towards organizations such as the Association for Ecclesiastical Primacy and GEAR, to which he alludes to multiple times in his theory.'
"These two theories were developed in order to explain the Anomaly Boom as they put the RPC Authority in an even larger effort to contain and research more anomalies."
I'd say, 'These two theories were developed in order to explain the Anomaly Boom and the increased effort of the Authority to contain and research these anomalies.'
"Even during the time of the Auctoritas Impertus, had the Authority even see at maximum 21 anomalies in the span of 50 years. Anomalies today are discovered on a yearly basis, at some years even a monthly basis."
'At the time of the Auctoritas Impertus, records show the organization would see at maxiumum 21 anomalies over the course of 50 years, while today, anomalies are discovered on a yearly basis, or even a monthly basis.'
"The theories were presented to the Research Division's…"
Just 'Research Division'.
"…on the day previously stated…"
While I'm assuming it's the 12th of December 1947, that's several paragraphs back and I feel it'd be easier for the reader to simply restate the date, if not move that sentence from the first paragraph to here.
"…and verdict of these two theories was reached 5 days later."
'And the verdict' would be more appropriate, and it's not really 'reached' as it was 'determined'.
"The Lead Director of the Research Division during 1947, Dr. ████████, rejected both proposals, explaining The Anomaly Boom event."
'The Lead Director of the Research Division at the time rejected both proposals, with a formal rejection notice cited below'. They, as in the Director, don't actually explain the Boom, but why they rejected the proposals.
"Therefore, we will continue to accept proposals by more researchers. If none of these proposals meet our standards, we will ask that all Research Divison personnel allow to take their own interpretation instead and call for a review of "The Anomaly Boom" at a later date."
'…while we will continue to accept proposals from researchers, we suggest that all personnel follow their own interpretation in the event that none of these proposals meet our standards as more evidence arises.' I feel that this would be more descriptive of what is going on and makes a bit more sense in-universe, but this is more of a stylistic choice than a direct issue with the article.
"Following the Rejection…"
Decapitalize 'rejection'.
"…for either being variation…"
'a variation'
"Dr. Osborne states that the Anderson Constant has decreased, from 3.97 to 3.9799981."
Did you mean to say '…from 3.97 to 3.9699981"? Because that's not a decrease as-is.
In any case, it's a good article, but some of these are pretty glaring and I think should be addressed.
I'll get right down to fixing the problems you pointed out! Good to see people are still reading this article. :D
Dreams. Each man longs to pursue his dream. Each man is tortured by this dream, but the dream gives meaning to his life. Even if the dream ruins his life, man cannot allow himself to leave it behind. In this world, is man ever able to possess anything more solid, than a dream?
~Kentaro Miura
You gave me a lot to think about on my writing style. I want to thank you for helping BetterMyButter. You really did better not only your butter but also my article.
Dreams. Each man longs to pursue his dream. Each man is tortured by this dream, but the dream gives meaning to his life. Even if the dream ruins his life, man cannot allow himself to leave it behind. In this world, is man ever able to possess anything more solid, than a dream?
~Kentaro Miura
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