It only took me 4.3333333… drafts, but I've finally finished my article and posted it to the mainlist. Not my first time doing so, but I'm pretty proud of this one.
This is one where I actually like that you hid the "real" article. It has a purpose for there to be a false cover article when many that try to do this don't. I like that you revealed a lot of the redacted information in the second version and the colours showing what changed was appreciated as well. Thank you for the colours you changed it too, much easier on the eyes now.
Btw I fixed some minor formatting things to make the interviews easier to read.
Yeah I was actually able to combine my OG idea with the new one with the hidden files. Originally (like 4 years ago originally) this was an article about a standard gatorade cooler that turned people into Gatorade addicts, that had a lot of the features as the -3 entities. That was kinda boring, but I thought it woukd be a good idea to make the end an interview with the actual gatorade company that ends with them implying that they created tons of anomalous objects like the coolers. That idea was scrapped.
This would be far more effective without the compulsion and instead relying on organic spread.
Seconded. The article works just fine without it, and I think some quick patchworks could help the article.
By the way. I really like the article, but it suffers from quite a few writing issues. PM me for details, since I'm not sure if you're reading this comment.
While the execution of the fake/real files gimmick is significantly better than standard in this article, the general narrative and content is not very appealing in regards to originality. It's by no means bad, but it shines less when considered along the many articles that have similar themes and narrative.