RPC-295 / Discussion

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dem crit

PhoenixOfHope 06 Mar 2019 00:03

http://www.rpc-wiki.net/forum/t-10374784/rpc-proposal:the-man-in-the-mosque

"the following content is a pure work of fiction. if there's a similarity in person, location, and historical timeline, it's a pure coincident."
yas. it has no real event inspiration. just imagination. sry.

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Re: dem crit (1/5)

ImNotEric 24 Mar 2019 03:09

I agree with Croal. It is simply too barebones. maybe add something like interview logs with the manifestation and/or expand on the collaboration between the locals and the authority. The bit about the alpha event felt put out of the blue, maybe use an interview with the locals to expand on that, it would be great perhaps with something about their mythology. Also, the article as it is feels too long for what it is. use the links provided below for your research: http://factsanddetails.com/world/cat55/sub358/entry-5229.html https://www.pewforum.org/2012/08/09/the-worlds-muslims-unity-and-diversity-4-other-beliefs-and-practices/ http://www.zwemercenter.com/guide/spirit-world-of-muslims/
Let me know if yo u follow through so I can re-rate.

Last edited on 26 Mar 2019 14:13 by ImNotEric Show more

Croal 06 Mar 2019 20:46

I feel like you could give RPC-295 a lot more character if you included an interview log with him, right now it feels a bit superficial.

PathetiqueSoul 16 Mar 2019 22:04

I don't know… these days this entry may be looked at in poor taste. Perhaps would need a few reworks.

DarkGreenEspeon 25 Mar 2019 16:28

I really enjoy this article. The idea is very unique and interesting, and the execution is good, if a little short. I agree with the others that this article could really benefit from an interview log, especially considering that the article says the anomaly does talk to people. The only real issue with this article is the myriad of wrong grammar and syntax:

Due to the anomalies' characteristics, the villager's capability1, and willingness of being isolated from the outsider, […]

[…] Class-C amnesics […]

[…] local populous […]

[…] the Indonesia language […]

Even with these mistakes, I consider this article a 4-star, though I still hope you can fix them. If you don't think you can do that yourself and can't find someone to do it for you, I's be willing to help.

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JimmyJohnJohnson 24 Sep 2019 18:01

Needs interview log. 4 stars

Almarduk 05 Apr 2022 02:22

It's alright, but honestly it feels a little too mundane. It does not capture the heroism that it tries to display, which I feel is because the Alpha events are too mundane and laconic. The lack of any characterization of 295 also hurts the article, and that final note is just too heavy-handed about the subject.

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